User:Winnie54/2016 NCAA Division I Women's Golf Championship/Caroliner6 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Winnie54


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Draft Reviewed
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Current Version
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Current Version

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Winnie!

I enjoyed reading this article about the NCAA Division I Women’s golf Championship! I copy-edited the content and made direct revisions for a few grammatical errors or typos I came across. Below I included comments on each section, referencing the peer review template form WikiEdu.

Lead:


 * The first paragraph of the lead offers good insight into what sections the article will include.
 * The second paragraph seems to introduce content that is not further discussed later in the article. I am curious if there is additional history behind this that could be discussed later in the article.

Content:


 * In the regional qualifying tournaments, I tried to edit the last bullet point because I think there are some grammatical errors. I just wanted to draw attention that specific copy-edit to ensure I didn’t change the message of the point too much.
 * The venue section feels slightly brief, but that might be because there really isn’t that much more to add so I am not sure. How do they choose the venue for the tournament? Is the golf course notable in any way?
 * The format section could include more context. While it is helpful to link to the 2015 NCAA Division I Women’s Golf Championship for reference, it could be useful to include a few sentences in this article about what the format looks like.

Tone and Balance:


 * The tone of the paper is neutral. While the venue and format sections are brief, the other sections feel balanced.

Sources:


 * The article is supported by reliable sources and includes some in-text citations. The regional qualifying tournaments, venue, and format sections could include in-text citations to strengthen the content in those sections.

Let me know if you have any questions about any of the comments I left. I look forward to reading the article again!

Reply Winnie54 (talk) 04:01, 29 January 2023 (UTC)

Hi Caroline!

Thank you so much for reading it and giving essential feedback! I will definitely work on the venue and format section. I will also provide in-text citation for the missing sections!