User:Winnie54/2016 NCAA Division I Women's Golf Championship/Hallekerickson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Winnie54


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * 2016 NCAA Division I Women's Golf Championship - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 2016 NCAA Division I Women's Golf Championship - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
What does it do well?

first of all, I think it is so cool and impressive that you started this article in general!

your first/introduction paragraph I think is very strong, it includes great information that introduces what the article is going to be about to do the reader. I think its great you separated the first two paragraphs, and waited until the second paragraph to talk about mens golf.

I am impressed with your sources, and think your citations are well spaced out.

The variety in forms of communicated information is great! I like how you involve texts in paragraphs but also utilize tables and charts and the bracket as well

I think it is important and beneficial to readers that you have a "see also" section with other relevant wikipedia articles.

'''What are some suggested changes? Why change those? Which change is most important?'''

for the "regional qualifying tournaments" was everything in that section from the 3rd reference? if not, I would suggest placing citations after each bullet point, in case one of those facts intrigues a reader and they can more easily click on the reference right away and visit it as they are intrigued. This is important for convenience of the reader but also to make sure it follows wikipedia citation guidelines.

do you need to cite anything under the venues section?

I think potentially I would add more detail into the format section, as it doesn't quite feel complete/clear enough from a readers point of view.

Is there anything you saw that you could apply to your own article?

your utilization of the charts and tables and bracket is visually appealing and makes your article more interesting for readers to look at! you have inspired me to incorporate varying ways of visuals into my article as I only edited in text/paragraph form. great work!

Reply Winnie54 (talk) 04:07, 29 January 2023 (UTC)

Hi!

Thank you for reading and reviewing my article! I appreciate your feedback and will incorporate the suggested changes. :)