User:WithGusto/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nancy_M._Petry

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article to evaluate because it relates to my coursework. My preliminary impression of the article is that it's adequately written but minor changes could be made to make it better.

Evaluate the article
The lead is overly detailed. Petry's employment history could be in its own category instead of in the lead. The dates of when she held positions could be added. Petry's awards could be in its own category as well instead of listed in the lead. Also, if Petry's death topic is going to consist of one sentence, then it should be condensed with the biography topic.