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In the "Libyan Civil War (2011)" article under the section "Organization" (Libyan Civil War (2011)), I plan on adding (after I reword and paraphrase) how "In Libya, the first assertion of a competing political authority came online, on a website declaring an alternative government in the form of the Interim Transitional National Council. One of Gaddafi’s senior advisors defected by tweeting his resignation and advising Gaddafi to flee."

In the "Libya" article under the section "2011 Civil War" (Libya), I plan on noting that Libya's authoritarian regime led by Muammar Gaddafi put up much more of a resistance compared to the regimes in Egypt and Tunisia. While overthrowing the regimes in Egypt and Tunisia was a relatively quick process, Gaddafi's campaign posed significant stalls on the uprisings in Libya.

In the "Black Lives Matter" article under the section "Media" (Black Lives Matter), I plan on adding that the primetime Fox drama 'Empire' aired season 3 episode 2 on September 28, 2016, which portrays Black Lives matter and police brutality when Andre Lyon is attacked by police officers for moving boxes outside his home, without any wrongdoing. Then, I plan on mentioning that the sitcom 'Black-ish' featured a debate about Black Lives Matter in the episode 'Hope'.

In the "Bakken pipeline" article under the section "Protest in popular culture" (Bakken pipeline), I plan on mentioning that on August 24, 2016, Susan Sarandon and Shailene Woodley joined a rally held outside U.S District Court in Washington D.C to support Rock Sioux Tribe Chairman David Archambault II in his effort to convince a judge to suspend construction on the pipeline. I also plan on adding Rosario Dawson to the list of american celebrities who have shown support for the cause.

In the "Occupy Wall Street" article under the section "Notable responses" (Occupy Wall Street), I plan on adding that notable figures who have joined the occupation include  David Crosby (of Crosby, Stills and Nash), Kanye West, Russell Simmons, Alec Baldwin, Susan Sarandon, Don King, Noam Chomsky, Jesse Jackson, Dr. Cornel West, and Michael Moore.

In the "HeForShe" article, I plan on adding a new section on criticisms of the campaign.

Transgender rights movement (Transgender rights movement)

I plan to write about Laverne Cox's contributions to the transgender rights movement and how her activism has increased trans visibility for people of color.

I plan to write about Lili Elbe's experience as one of the first recipients of gender reassignment surgery.

I plan on making a section about transgender terminology.

Peer review suggestions:
For the Media section under BLM it would be interesting to see if these airings have had any impact and possibly asses viewership if you are able to find that. Maybe also seeing viewer sentiments might be something good to look at.

For the "baken pipeline” article I didn’t see the specific protest in pop culture section. Not sure if you were creating this part of the article? It would have been helpful if you had outlined a couple of sentences with general information of pop culture being involved in this protest. I think that looking at video interviews might be something that could give you more insight on the pop culture icons being involved.

For Laverne Cox you could talk about all the talks she does and any groups she is highly involved in. For the gender reassignment surgery going further into the the topic besides the story. For example you could delved into advancements in technology since the first procedure, the frequency of the procedures and possibly areas around the world in which it occurs in higher frequency.

General advice: it would be nice if you could dive deeper into the topics as opposed to mainly adding notable pop culture figures involved in such causes.

Good work on finding a sufficient amount of sources. You seem to have a good mix of peer reviewed sources and general sources. I think you're off to a great start!

 Response to peer review: 

Thank you so much for your feedback!
 * Thanks for pointing out that you can no longer see the "protest in pop culture" section in the "bakken pipeline" article. I think that the whole article has been recently restructured and even renamed. There is now a separate, complementary article to what is now named the "Dakota Access Pipeline" article (Dakota Access Pipeline) called the "Access Pipeline protests" article (Dakota Access Pipeline protests). There is no section in this article about high profile protesters in pop culture, and so I intend on creating a new section that will include what the roles of numerous pop culture figures in this section.

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 Final draft of article edits: 

Libya (Libya)

Under the section "2011 Civil War" (Libya), I wrote:

Libya's authoritarian regime led by Muammar Gaddafi put up much more of a resistance compared to the regimes in Egypt and Tunisia. While overthrowing the regimes in Egypt and Tunisia was a relatively quick process, Gaddafi's campaign posed significant stalls on the uprisings in Libya.

The first announcement of a competing political authority appeared online and declared the Interim Transitional National Council as an alternative government. One of Gaddafi's senior advisors responded by posting a tweet, wherein he resigned, defected, and advised Gaddafi to flee.

Black Lives Matter (Black Lives Matter)

Under the section "Media" (Black Lives Matter), I wrote:
 * Primetime Fox drama 'Empire' aired season 3 episode 2 on September 28, 2016, which portrays Black Lives matter and police brutality when Andre Lyon is attacked by police officers for moving boxes outside his home, without any wrongdoing.
 * ABC sitcom 'Black-ish' featured a debate about Black Lives Matter in the episode 'Hope'.

Dakota Access Pipeline protests (Dakota Access Pipeline protests)

Under the "Movement support" (Dakota Access Pipeline protests) section I wrote:

on August 24, 2016, Susan Sarandon and Shailene Woodley joined a rally held outside U.S District Court in Washington D.C to support Rock Sioux Tribe Chairman David Archambault II in his effort to convince a judge to suspend construction on the pipeline.

Many other notable figures and celebrities have voiced support for the protest, including Rosario Dawson, Pharrell Williams, and Leonardo DiCaprio.

Occupy Wall Street (Occupy Wall Street)

Under the "Notable responses" (Occupy Wall Street) section, I wrote:

Many notable figures joined the occupation, including David Crosby (of Crosby, Stills and Nash), Kanye West, Russell Simmons, Alec Baldwin, Susan Sarandon, Don King, Noam Chomsky, Jesse Jackson, Dr. Cornel West, and Michael Moore.

HeForShe (HeForShe)

I made a new section titled "Criticisms" and wrote:

Though the HeForShe campaign has been met with widespread support and approval, it has also been met with criticism. Some have expressed concerns that the campaign and particularly the name of it, leaves behind individuals who suffer most from gender inequality, such as non-binary individuals. Some claim that the campaign is inherently sexist for upholding the very gender stereotypes it denounces, demonstrated by the name "He for She," where it is implied the stronger male allies need to step up to defend the more sensitive and victimized females. Those critics also believe that the campaign sidelines men. Some critics also note that the campaign is run by privileged women of the United Nations who have not had to endure the many struggles of gender inequality that inhibit the majority of those who suffer from it.

Transgender rights movement (Transgender rights movement)

I made a new section titled "In pop culture" and wrote:

Many celebrities have spoken out in support of transgender rights and often in conjunction with overall support for the LGBTQ community. Numerous celebrities voice such support for the Human Rights Campaign, including Archie Panjabi, Lance Bass, Tituss Burgess, Chelsea Clinton, George Clooney, Tim Cook, Jesse Tyler Ferguson, Sally Field, Lady Gaga, Whoopi Goldberg, Anne Hathaway, Jennifer Hudson, Caitlyn Jenner, Jazz Jennings, Elton John, Cyndi Lauper, Jennifer Lopez, Demi Lovato, Natasha Lyonne, Ellen Page, Brad Pitt, Geena Rocero, Bruce Springsteen, Jeffrey Tambor, Charlize Theron, Miley Cyrus, and Lana Wachowski.

Orange Is the New Black actress Laverne Cox has been particularly outspoken about the importance of transgender rights. Being transgender herself, Cox has experienced firsthand the issues that surround those who are transgender and often uses her own story to promote the movement for transgender rights. She sees her fame as an opportunity to bring awareness to causes that matter and that her unique position legitimizes the transgender rights movement. Particularly, she believes that transgender individuals have been historically overlooked and sidelined not just socially, but in the fight for civil rights as well. Cox acknowledges the progress that has been made for Gay rights, but that it is important to focus on transgender rights separately, seeing as it has historically been grouped together with other causes and used as an umbrella term. In 2014, Glamour magazine named Cox Woman of the Year in recognition of her activism.

In April 2015, Olympic gold medalist and reality TV star Bruce Jenner came out as transgender. The news had been speculated for months leading up to the announcement, but still shocked the public and received considerable attention. Jenner expressed the desire to transition and to be known as Caitlyn Jenner and introduced herself for the first time on the cover of Vanity Fair. Jenner's transition has been documented by the short-lived reality television series titled I am Cait. Jenner was determined to make a difference and bring awareness to transgender rights, believing that telling her story can do so. Jenner did increase transgender visibility, however, her commentary and series were criticized for misrepresenting the struggles of the majority the trans community, who are much less privileged than her and face deeper problems.

I made a new section titled "Other notable figures" and wrote:

Lili Elbe is noted as one of the first to undergo gender reassignment surgery. Born in 1882, Elbe was a transgender painter from Denmark. Elbe had decided to commit suicide but decided against it when a doctor claimed that he could perform a gender reassignment surgery on Elbe. After undergoing four high risk experimental surgeries, Elbe died of post-op complications. Her story is depicted in the 2015 film, The Danish Girl.

I made a new section titled "Terminology" and wrote:

Terminology within the transgender community often changes and with it, connotations of certain terms can also change.

The broadest term used is "transgender," which typically refers to an individual who identifies with a gender different to the one assigned to them at birth. The term is used as an adjective and can be taken offensively is used as a noun. "Trans" is a shorthand for "transgender." The term "transgender man" refers to a transgender individual who identifies as a man and the term "transgender woman" refers to a transgender individual who identifies as a woman. These are acceptable and appropriate terms to use and many variations of the terms tend to have a negative connotation and are deemed offensive and even derogatory.

Significant backlash and controversy was generated when the term " trans* " was introduced into transgender terminology. The asterisk at the end of the term stems from the online practice wherein putting an asterisk at the end of a search subject includes search results that include any variation of the part before the asterisk. For example, if "trans*" were to be typed into a search engine, the search results would include topics such as transmission, transfer, transaction, transgender, etc. The "trans*" term was intended to be an umbrella term to be more inclusive and encompass more identities within the transgender community. However, the term faced significant backlash for backfiring and being fundamentally oppressive. The criticism stems from the existence of an already inclusive term "transgender," and how many viewed the new "trans*" term as unnecessary given the preexisting inclusive term. Thus, many LGBTQ and particularly transgender rights activists denounce the use of the term