User:Wittlj/Lake Okeechobee/Fernandesi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wittlj


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Lake Okeechobee Limnology section draft


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lake Okeechobee

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Paragraphs


 * Good lead paragraph.
 * You briefly mention the geology to explain the thermal stratification.
 * It was good you didn't go in depth on this subject since in the original article, there already is a whole Geology section.
 * Make sure you are summarizing the whole section in the lead paragraph. Not just talking about new information.

Content and Organization


 * It is interesting that you separated algal blooms from the biota section
 * I understand giving eutrophication its own section. That's fine.
 * I would put the Eutrophication section under the Biota section. That way it transitions better from algal blooms in Flora to that.
 * The Eutrophication section looks really good! Full of content from reputable sources, and easy to read.
 * I would put some more information into the Fauna. It looks like a good start so far.

Sources / Links


 * All your sources appear to be good scientific papers.
 * Good job linking to different Wikipedia pages throughout.
 * The ones I clicked on worked.
 * I would check the citation of your 12th source. It seems to think the date values is off.
 * You can do this by clicking the superscript number then clicking Edit.

Grammar / Spelling / Etcetera


 * Only a couple of minor grammar edits.
 * Make sure there is a space between a number and its units
 * Check your commas. If you say something out loud and there is a short pause, that indicates a comma. If not, there's no comma.
 * Your first sentence is a run on sentence. Can be spilt into two sentences, as well as do not start off a sentence with 'because'
 * "Because Lake Okeechobee is relatively shallow, with an average depth of only 3 meters, and has a long fetch of 54km, the lake is normally mixed, but on days with direct sunlight and limited wind, the lake can exhibit diurnal thermal stratification."
 * Lake Okeechobee is relatively shallow, with. . . . . a long fetch of 54 km. The lake. . . can exhibit diurnal thermal stratification.
 * Spelling overall looks good.