User:WiznerdTheEagle/Data Imaginaries/Lokio2021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

WiznerdTheEagle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:WiznerdTheEagle/Data_Imaginaries?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Data Imaginaries: Lead


 * The information included in the first three sentences of your article lead are relevant however it could be condensed to better communicate the relationship. For example "A data imaginary, produced by social institutions and practices, is a particular framing of data that defines what data are and what can be done with them, and activity influences how people understand and use data".
 * Thank you for pointing out the clarity needed in the relationship. I do want to keep my general three sentence structure rather than reducing it that far, but I have tweaked the section to improve the flow and specifically improve that relationship.
 * Great!
 * "The current dominant data imaginary is that of data analytics, which treats data as a neutral resource to extract value from". This could be restated in a more neutral tone, to comply with Wikipedia rules. Who views this as the dominant data imaginary? Why? Why might others not see it as a dominant imaginary (i.e someone in a different field).
 * To clarify, it is the most dominant in that it is the most most established imaginary and alternative imaginaries are essentially trying to upset its foothold. I have rephrased and added a citation to improve the section.
 * Thanks for clarifying! Looks great! I think changing it to "most established" assumes more of a neutral tone.

Data Imaginaries: Theoretical Basis


 * "The concept of data imaginaries draws on the sociological imaginary. In sociology, imaginaries are social constructions that stem from social institutions and practices that prioritize different aspects of something". What does "something" mean? An object? An idea? Could explain a little further or provide an example relevant to the article, like data.
 * Something means literally anything, it's a generic concept that can be applied across areas. Using a word like "something" bugged me while drafting too. I have rephrased to describe it more concretely.
 * Great!
 * "These imaginaries are not fake or meaningless, as they direct how people think about a concept like data and what they think is able to be done with them". Could be restated in a neutral tone to comply with Wikipedia rules. Rather than make a statement about its importance, which assumes a specific view, try to explain it more to balance your argument.
 * Clarified that this is part of the definition of "imaginaries" according to the sociological theory.
 * Great!

Data Imaginaries: Competing Imaginaries


 * "This competition is not to be confused with debates over the use of data, as groups or individuals competing over what data should be used for may share the same imaginary despite their contrasting views, so long as they agree, explicitly or implicitly, on how data can be used and what for" This sentence is very confusing to follow. You could potentially split it up or play around with the structure to better communicate the message.
 * Yeah, you're right. I get weird with clauses sometimes and I don't notice until someone points it out. I think I fixed it.
 * No worries, I do the same. A potential tip for next time, I often read it out loud and that can help me identify run ons or awkward clauses :)
 * "The definition of success in a competition of imaginaries is a particular imaginary being considered common sense". How is this achieved? What is common sense and how is it defined in relation to data imaginaries?
 * This is the kind of statement that feels normal to me because I'm neck deep in social constructivism. Rephrased to clarify.

Data Imaginaries: Competing Imaginaries: Data Activists


 * To further your point, you could provide an example of how the data imaginary is used and competing imaginaries to balance the neutral tone of your article.
 * Very good point. Added.
 * Love that example!

Data Imaginaries: Competing Imaginaries: Critical Data Studies


 * Spelling mistake correction. Original = "Critical data studies, the academic discipline the produced the notion of data imaginaries, has its own imaginary." Correction = "Critical data studies, the academic discipline that produced the notion of data imaginaries, has its own imaginary."
 * Wow, how did I miss that. Thanks. Fixed.
 * My pleasure!

General Comments


 * I really liked how you linked certain words to other wikipedia articles, this helped further my understanding of the topic and make relevant connections to other topics
 * Your structure is very clear and each subsection has a logical connection to the topic
 * The lead section is a great overview and touches on everything you talked about in the main body of the article
 * Great use of reliable sources to produce your article with relevant and up to date information
 * You data analytics subsection is great, I loved how you included an example to further convey your point. My point above in the lead about "the current dominant data imaginary" could be restated to assume a more neutral tone but other than that it was very clear.