User:Wkimmerling/Prison sexuality/Alicia.m3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wkimmerling, Rileyjaylen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Prison sexuality
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has not been updated to reflect new content updated my fellow classmates. However, the lead provides good insight into what the article will talk about. This is because it's concise and includes descriptions of major sections of the article. These major sections in the lead are prisoners relationship with each other, their relationship with other prisoners, and sexual violence. My peers could add more about HIV/AIDs in the lead as it is included in the article but not mentioned in the lead. The content provided is objective and in a neutral tone as it goes into some controversial content. For example the article talks about how women form fake families in prison and same-sex sexual activity between women and male prisoners. Also, the content is very detailed and backed up by mostly reliable and peer reviewed sources. However, there are certain sections in which citations needed to be updated. For example, under the prison rape section there is clarification needed on a source that talks about how individuals who conduct prison rape use sex to intimidate their victims. There is also a citation under social constructionist approach that says "who" after the name Donald Clemmer. It would be wise for my peers to find a reliable source to clarify who this is. Overall, the article is concise and clear. However, something I would add to this article is related images with well written captions. Currently, there is no images on this article. It does not seem like my classmates have provided much content to the article so I recommend they do that as there is room for improvement in this article.