User:Wkimmerling/Prison sexuality/Dmg31500 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rileyjaylen Wkimmerling


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Prison Sexuality


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * I feel like the lead section of this article provided a clear introduction to what the article is going to be about. Personally, I would have maybe taken the definitions provided in the lead and made them either an individual section or put them closer to each other; more concise and easy to read.
 * I don't think the lead gives much direction as to what sections are going to be present in the article. The lead gives more information about terms related to prison sexuality and a little background research, but there really isn't any indication of what sections there will be.
 * I couldn't find anything in the lead that was not later discussed at some point in the article.
 * I think the lead was a little bit long and over detailed. I think there are a few points that could have been moved to other sections instead of being drawn out in the lead. For example, the last paragraph about segregation of sexes in prison could have been put in the prisoner-prisoner relationships section instead of in the lead.

Content:


 * I think all of the content in this article is relevant to the topic. I feel like there's a few areas that need more explanation, but everything discussed seems relevant.
 * The majority of sources used in this article are up to date, at least within the last 10 years.
 * I think another area that needs some more explanation is the consequences of staff and inmate sexual encounters. I'm sure there are repercussions that a staff member would face if getting caught using their position of power to manipulate inmates. It may be interesting to add in some information about these consequences, and laws protecting inmates.

Tone and Balance:


 * I felt that the information provided is from a neutral stance. I didn't notice any statements that seemed opinionated or persuasive.
 * I think this article does a really good job of staying neutral and providing basic facts rather than opinions or views. They could have included information about political views about prison sexuality, but this could have led to some biased statements.

Sources and References:


 * I couldn't find any statements not backed up by a source.
 * From the sources I checked, all information provided was consistent with the sources information.
 * All sources were pretty current, but I think it would probably be easy to find more updated sources; specifically, in regard to some of the statistics provided. I'm not sure if there is more current data for the statistics, but I think there probably is.
 * All the links I clicked on did work.

Overall impressions:


 * I really enjoyed this article and thought it was very informative.
 * Again, I think maybe adding something about consequences of a staff member engaging in sexual acts with an inmate, and what laws are in place to protect the rights of inmates. Also, is there a difference in sexual activity among different types of prison/jails? For example, maximum security versus minimum security prisons?