User:Wobbegong027/Evaluate an Article

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Loderingo degli Andalò

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
Loderingo deli Andalo appears in Canto XXIII, in which Dante and Virgil venture into the circle where the hypocrites reside. Catalano, one of the sinners in the circle, introduces himself and Loderingo as part of the Jovial Friars. I was interested in learning more about their lives and why they committed crimes of hypocrisy.

Evaluate the article
All of the content in the article is relevant to Loderingo's biography. A relatively large portion of the content is about the order of which he was a part, the Knights of Saint Mary. However, it was helpful, concise information that gives important context to his life. The tone is neutral throughout the article. The citations appear to be of reliable sources, though there are only two. There is no talk page, so it may be helpful to start a conversation about potential edits to this entry. To improve this article, I would:


 * Add in-text citations. I could not tell where each fact was drawn from, which confused me later on, such as the lines:
 * "The Order, which was approved by Pope Alexander IV, was the first religious order of knighthood to grant the rank of 'militissa' to women who were the daughter, spouse or widow of a Knight."
 * In 1267 he joined the Jovial Friars' monastery that he had founded at Ronzano where he stayed until his death."
 * Paraphrase the sentence, "Its mission was to promote peace between warring municipal factions, but its members soon succumbed to self-interest and it was suppressed by Sixtus V in 1558.", which seemed to be too close to an entry found in Paget's Concise Dictionary of Proper Names and Notable Matters in the Works of Dante (256).


 * Do further fact-checking of the sentence, "The Order and the monastery were founded in 1233," and edit or remove to suit my findings. I found this sentence to be very confusing, I read "the Order" as referring to the Jovial Friars, though there is already and earlier sentence stating that Loderingo founded the Order in 1261. I also was not sure what monastery the sentence was referring to, as the last monastery mentioned was the one founded by his sister. However, I believe it was meant to refer to the Jovial Friars' monastery.
 * Elaborate more on how and why Dante, as well as other Florentines, deem Loderingo a hypocrite (i.e. Catalano and Loderingo supposedly took the joint leadership position to balance out the Guelf/Ghibelline rivalry, though they furthered Clement IV's agenda against the Ghibellines. The two also were part of an order meant to promote peace, but their actions resulted in violence against the Ghibellines).