User:Wombatsaregreat/Food and Agriculture Organization/Taylor.daws Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wombatsaregreat


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wombatsaregreat/Food_and_Agriculture_Organization?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Food and Agriculture Organization

Evaluate the drafted changes
In terms in content I think the organization of the article is very clear and easy to follow. The topic is relevant and adds to the thoroughness of the original wikipedia article. I think it would be helpful to expand on why endorsing agricultural biotechnology affects "the economic and cultural livelihoods of millions" because I think this statement may be unclear to readers who are unfamiliar with the effects of agricultural biotechnology. I also think backing up this statement with facts will make it sound less like an opinion, making the piece more neutral in tone. In addition to details about the negative effects of the endorsement, it may be helpful to explain the arguments from the other side, those in support of using agricultural biotechnology to achieve food security. By having detailed arguments from the perspective of those supporting and criticizing the endorsement, readers will be able to make well informed opinions on this topic. Overall, I think this is very clear and relevant content, and I would focus on adding more specific details and making the tone more neutral in order to strengthen the article.

Citations

Your article is well cited and the sources you used are reliable. I suggest adding active links to the citations so that readers are able to access your sources directly from the wikipedia page. When I clicked your second source with the "doi" link it did not work for me, so I would confirm that this is a usable link for the general public.