User:Womenartist/Angelica Becerra/Izcolor Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Womenartist's draft.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Womenartist/Angelica_Becerra?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No current version

Evaluate the drafted changes
Here's my peer review for you!!

Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - Yes, the lead that you added is reflects the content that you have created!

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? - Yes, so far I have seen that you added the Early life and education, Art, and exhibitions.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - Yes many of the articles you've added into the article are new, from 2017-2021.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - I think the title, "Article Draft - Angélica" is unnecessary as this is just a title for you, but when you click to view the article it shows up as a part of the content.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? - Yes it does you are addressing a Chicana artist that has not been written about.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? - Yes mostly, I think some parts in your Art section are written with a different and non-neutral tone. For example, when you say "Becerra found minimal representation in communities and how this was an inspiration to want to create visibility ." You can instead say, "in an interview .... Becerra talks about how she found minimal representation in communities ... " That way it is directly referencing the source and also does not sound like your opinion on the artist.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?: Yes, definitely you are addressing viewpoints on the artist that have not been represented at all.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - Yes, most are. Here are the sentences where you still need to add citations:

Angélica Becerra is and artist and many Becerra's works discuss social justice issues.

Angélica Becerra immigrated at an early age to Los Angeles.

Angelica Moved to the South Bay at the beginning stage of her life.

She then learns how express herself though the Arts with her aunt teaching her how draw.


 * Are the sources thorough - Yes! Great job finding good sources.
 * Are the sources current? - Yes again you have a broad arrange of articles from 2017-2021

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - Yes, it is well written, however I think you should read the draft back to yourself as there are quite a few sentence errors. I think this was just due to not editing the draft. Some of the sentences are split in the middle. I will copy paste the ones that need revising:

She is a visual artist who mostly uses Watercolor as her medium. And digital more recently with her political graphics.

One of Angélica is a image of Sandra Cisneros who is writer this art has Sandra quotes  that talks about women empowerment with Angélica political style art poster

Angélica most resent series title Flowers Latinx Activist Portraits, She worked with  activists and painted six portraits each portrait of activists had their favorite flower or plant.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Yes, there are a few grammatical errors, I will list them below!

"Becerra is and educator at the La Casa de la Culture." should be "Becerra is an educator at the La Casa de la Culture."

"Angélica Becerra is and artist and many Becerra's works discuss social justice issues." should be, "Angélica Becerra is an artist, and many Becerra's works discuss social justice issues."

"Becerra found minimal representation in communities and want to create visibility ." should be, "Becerra found minimal representation in communities and wanted to create visibility ."

"Her creative process of making her art begins with research her art work is not only influence by political but by the way she uses her watercolors." Should be, "Her creative process of making her art begins with research. Her art work is not only influenced by politics, but by the way she uses her watercolors."


 * Is the content added well-organized - I think that your organization could use a little work as some of your sentences start a topic and then jump to a different one right after. For example, when you talk about her creative process, you say that she begins first with researching and then jump to talking about how her art is influence by politics and her use of watercolors. I think that if you connect these two ideas with a sentence in the middle it would flow much more smoothly. For example, you could add that her research includes looking up political issues that are important to her and that are relevant to the current times (or elaborate more on what you found her research consists of).

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - Yes, you did a wonderful job researching and creating an article on this Chicana artist that no one has looked into as of yet.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? I believe the whole article consisted of strengths :) You included a lot of research on this Chicana artist that you found and filled in a lot of gaps that were present.