User:Woodwix/Katja Blichfeld/Matierallygirly Peer Review

General info
Woodix
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Woodwix/Katja_Blichfeld?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Katja Blichfeld

Evaluate the drafted changes
There are few changes to the lead, but since the original provides a clear overview of her career, there is little need to edit it further.

The body adds a key "Career" section to the page, where it previously only examined her personal life. This is critical work that falls in line with our mandate. It successfully covers the arc of her career. It could, however, benefit from some further editing. The first sentence, for example, repeats "Casting" three times in the same sentence. I would consider how to rephrase some of the sentences for brevity. For example, instead of: "Blichfeld’s first work in casting was as a casting assistant 2005 for Comedy Central’s Roast of Jeff Foxworthy, followed by her work as a casting associate on the 2006 mystery thriller Freedomland." You could write "In 2005, Blichfield began her casting career on Comedy Central's Roast of Jeff Foxworthy as an assistant. The next year, she worked as a casting associate on the mystery-thriller Freedomland."

The user rightly transfers information from the former "Personal life" section and creates an "Early life and education section." I would avoid starting each sentence with Blitchfield, but otherwise, it looks great!

The new personal life section does a great job describing her relationship experiences. Additionally, the new Filmography section is excellent.

Given that this is an edit, there should be little concern for establishing relevance. Great job!