User:Woodwix/Katja Blichfeld/PinkGlitterGirl Peer Review

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 * Katja Blichfeld

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead
Lead has not changed. The removal of the unnecessary infobox simplified article aesthetics!

Content
This article addresses the equity gap by providing relevent professional information about a successful female creative not related to her personal life/relationship. While I understand the inclusion of details related to her coming out journey and divorce, I think it needs tweaking to trim extraneous details or combine thoughts for brevity. Prehaps combine paragraph 4 and 5 of personal life to like this

"The couple separated in 2016 following Blichfeld's admission of infidelity with another woman. Their divorce was finalized prior to the commencement of season two of High Maintenance. The pair continued to collaborate on three more seasons of High Maintenance, until the 2021 announcement of the shows indefinite hiatus."

The wikipedia filmography is non-exhaustive and excludes a majority of her casting work.

Tone and Balance
A lot of the content added is sourced from interviews with the subject representing her subjective view over independent secondary sources.

Sources and References
Four new sources added—Oral history/interview with High Maintenance cast, profile of Blichfeld and Sinclair, Deadline article, and IMBD. While two of the new sources are thorough—providing rich information—they are also primary sources. Article would be bolstered by additional secondary sources, especially ones speaking to her body of work. Consider

Legacy of High Maintenance

Secondary Independent source reflecting move from Vimeo to HBO

Secondary Independent source containing production information on High Maintenance

Article claims 2 Emmy nominees in 2010 and 2011 but source only confirmes the 2011 nominee, 2010 award also not listed on her IMBD—Jennifer McNamara-Shroff is listed as the 2010 nominee.

Note: Sources under Conde Nast (Vanity Fair, Vouge, GQ) do not automatically cite properly—be sure to replace company name with the writers name prior to publishing. Only note 1 and 10 seem to have the proper author attached in citation.

Organization
The content is well-written for the most part!

There are a few sentences that don't flow so well and could be combined. Consider the following edit to the career section for brevity

"Blichfeld co-created the High Maintenance web series with her then husband in 2012 as a passion project. The pair were the sole writers of the 19 webisodes, which they produced for less than $1,000 apiece "

Information not always presented intuitively for example the sentence regarding her awards would make more sense if it was linear.


 * The information regarding her struggle with anxiety seems haphazardly placed into the article—consider rewriting to improve flow.
 * In Early Life and Education - Order information linearly to "Blichfeld’s parents were first-generation immigrants from Denmark, arriving in the United States in 1970. In 1979, Blichfeld was born in Long Beach, California where she was raised as an evangelical Christian and attended religious schools. Following her high school graduation, Blichfeld briefly enrolled in Long Beach City College before she dropped out to move to Chicago. In 2004, she moved to New York to pursue a career in casting."

The inclusion of a filmography table greatly improves the article but given the variety of mediums I would suggest adding a column indicating movie, comedy special, tv shows to illustrate her breadth of experience at a glance. I would also suggest making the web show a separate entry on the list.

Overrall Impression
The content added greatly improved the quality of the article by including her professional information. Content added would be improved with careful editing for clarity and brevity. Additional sources and more prudent fact checking would bolster the credibility of the article.