User:Wormygal/Collective animal behavior/TV2424 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

wormygal reviewed by TV2424


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wormygal/Collective_animal_behavior?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Collective animal behavior

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi wormygal, your content is great! The lead gives a great summary of what the article will be about, it is concise and sounds professional. The only thing I would mention for this section is to add references to most of the sentences, I saw that these are statements from the original article which were not referenced there but I think you have to find references that support those statements if you reword the sections and they will be included in the article. I also noticed this for the first two sentences and the second last sentence in the "social interaction" section, and in both sections of "group structure". All the content is relevant to the behavior you are describing and I think it is organized very well. You have great sentence structures and I think your reworded sections elevate the whole article. All the content has a neutral tone, I don't at all feel persuaded to believe this behavior, it is informative and interesting. All the sources you added are from credible journals indicating that they are reliable and there is a nice array of publishing years indicating that this behavior has been looked at for many years and emphasizes it's importance to the field of biology/animal behavior. No images/media were added but I think the original images are placed well and appropriate to the topic so I think it is a good idea to leave them. With the added citations and rewording, the article does feel more complete and flows a lot better, the only thing I noticed was the missing citations in the text so overall I think this is a great article and I hope that my feedback along with the feedback of others will help improve this Wikipedia article! great work