User:WrittenasRae/Fairy Queen/Chrysosli Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

WrittenasRaw


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:WrittenasRae/Fairy Queen
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fairy Queen

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I found the introductory of the article to be more informative and straight to the point then the original. There wasn't any unnecessary information like "...usually with a king" or repeating the phrase "Fairy Queen." You provided information information if I was skimming the article for some quick facts. I.e. the different names and the different medias she is reference in.

Content

I think you did a good job keeping the writing neutral and just matter-of-fact. The only thing that I noticed is that there isn't as much information compared to the original (I could be misunderstand how the sandbox works.) But I like how much more organized the information is in the different. I think it would be more beneficial to breakdown the different medias and history of the Fairy Queen.

Bibliography

I think all the sources that you used all seem to be reliable and give a good neutral source.