User:WutUpJut/Interactive media/Queenones87 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

WutUpJut


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:WutUpJut/Interactive_media?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Interactive media
 * Interactive media

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead - I didn't notice a new lead draft here. Could be something that you are still working on writing.

Content - I feel that everything you added to the article is relevant and current. I didn't notice any additional gaps that I could think of. I also felt like you focused on "Wikipedias Equity Gaps" looking to those who are on the spectrum, and how interactive media can have positive impacts on their lives.

Tone and Balance - Everything you provided appears to be neutral. You make a point to highlight both the advantages and disadvantages. Nothing appears to be bias, nor does it feel persuasive at all. You do a good job of talking about interactive media, highlight the good and the bad, allowing us to come to our own conclusions.

Sources and References - Everything written is backed up by a reliable source. All of the sources are up to date, and provide detailed and relevant information on the topic. The sources used do in fact back up the information provided and are written by a diverse group of authors. All of the sources provided appear to be peer reviewed and cover a wide variety of information. The links work, though I've noticed some appear to have errors that say to "check date values" so I would just look into that. I had a similar issue with mine, and I had to simply erase the date that the source was written and re-type it in.

Organization - I found your article to be very well written, clear and concise. You did not get overly wordy on information, which made it very easy to read. I didn't notice any spelling errors, though I saw one spot in particular that could use a comma, in my option. In the beginning section under "Effects on Learning" you say "...immersive media such as virtual reality..." I would consider adding a comma after "immersive media." Other than that small change, everything looks good. Everything is well organized and broken down into the appropriate sections.

Overall Impressions - I was very interested in reading this article after looking at your draft. You share a lot of insightful impacts that interactive media can have on society. I found it to be very interesting and thought provoking. I would like to see you expand on the "Effects on Learning" specifically surrounding the students who are on the spectrum. I feel like the initial article has some good information on this, but a little more would definitely be better. Overall, I think you've done a great job at adding additional information to this article.