User:WynnUCBA/User:WynnUCBA/sandbox/Craig lane5 Peer Review

He gave clear information about the article that easily made since.I was impressed by how clean his information flows.Yes he had a turn of phrase when he was talking about the scores and games he gave clear information about how they won and how much they won by.

The only changes I would make to your article is I would add more information so that the reader fully understands what you're talking about.I believe by adding more evidence it would make the reader more interested and help them better understand your information.

I liked how he added dates and times I think I will add some dates and times to my article too.

I feel like I fully understand what he's talking about it is very interesting and has clear information.I believe that he kept a clear topic and stayed with it the whole article.And I believe all the information reflects back to FC Cincinnati.

I don't think any information is missing but I think if you added some more information maybe special events that happened at the game or the challenges they had to really pul the article together.

I believe it is in a perfect order although I think you should add one more topic so the reader gets more information about the FC Cincinnati soccer team and clearly understand who they are.I would also talk about the years before when they played bad so that the reader sees that they worked to get where they are and that's why they're winners.I really like how your added the links over the places like FC Cincinnati so if the reader needed more information about these things they could just click on it and get a whole list of things.