User:Wyogirl1/Lourdes Huanca Atencio/Nbhakdibhumi Peer Review

Lead:

The article’s lead provides a succinct introduction to Lourdes Esther Huanca Atencio and details the article’s major sections on Atencio’s involvement in FENMUCARINAP and FILAC to a satisfying degree. However, the lead mentions Atencio’s recognition by Peru’s Ministry of Justice and Human Rights, which is not mentioned in the article. Similarly, the article discusses Atencio’s political involvement, and this section is not mentioned in the lead.

Content:

The content added is relevant to the topic as all sections regarding FENMUCARINAP, FILAC, and political involvements are all related to the article’s main topic on Lourdes Esther Huanca Atencio. The content is up-to-date since it describes Atencio’s political involvement in 2023. The article’s content also addresses topics related to historically underrepresented populations/topics as the article details Atencio’s advocacy against gender-based violence in indigenous communities and emphasizes the lack of sexual education in indigenous rural communities. However, although throughout the article there is an indication of Atencio’s involvement in multiple organizations, there should be more detail on how she was involved in these movements and how her actions specifically contributed to the organizations’ successes/the significance of her involvement. For example, the article’s section on FILAC states that Atencio held the position of “Indigenous Delegate of Peru before FILAC” and discusses the objectives of FILAC. However, the article does not detail the contributions Atencio made to FILAC under the position she was assigned. Similarly, in the article’s FENMUCARINAP section, there is an abundance of detail on FENMUCARINAP as an organization overall but insufficient attention to Atencio’s contributions as the organization’s founder. Additionally, the article could be made even better if the author added more information regarding Atencio’s early and personal life.

Tone and Balance:

The content added appears neutral as it does not provide opinions regarding the topics being discussed. Nevertheless, to a certain extent, Atencio’s viewpoint is overly represented as the article’s content mentions Atencio’s own words in multiple sections of the article.

Sources and References:

The sources utilized in the article are satisfying because they were all produced within the last five years, and the majority of sources were produced in 2023. Therefore, the content is backed up by a recent and reliable secondary source of information. Additionally, the sources are from a diverse spectrum of authors, as some are derived from UNICEF and academic articles produced by Duke University Press. The article also showcases the use of an interview with Atencio herself as a source. On top of this, the article includes sources from historically marginalized individuals to a certain extent as 2 sources were written in Spanish by Latin American authors. Also, all the links work, and thus, readers are able to access sources that are referenced easily. Despite these evaluations, it can be deduced that the article authors performed well in selecting a sufficient number of sources that satisfy the career for a good Wikipedia article that is new.

Organization:

The article is easy to read due to the good use of headings and subheadings guiding the reader. However, the content does have a few grammatical errors and sentence organization errors that make it difficult to read. For instance, the article’s last paragraph on Atencio’s involvement in the resistance to the coup that led to the removal of Pedro Castillo had to be read a couple of times before understanding the sequence of events. Additionally, there is a mention of FENMUCARINAP in the Political Involvement section’s last few sentences which seems irrelevant to the content being discussed, or the article author has not made clear how FENMUCARINAP is tied to Atencio’s involvement in the coup. Improving the article’s grammar and sentence organization would significantly improve the article as it would enable readers to better and more easily understand the topic being discussed. The organization and the discussed improvements on content are the most important improvements that should be made.

Images and Media:

The article includes one photograph, which is a portrait photograph of Atencio in Bolivia. The image is well captioned and enhances the reader’s understanding of the topic by placing a face on Atencio. However, the author could add more images of Atencio during her involvement in various organizations to enhance the reader’s understanding of Atencio’s significant role in each organization. Nevertheless, my article on Arria Ly does not include any images and media. Therefore, reviewing this article has reminded me that my group should add images and media to enhance the reader’s understanding of our topic.

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