User:Xinyu Cai111111/Cybersex trafficking/DevilsHolePupfishFanatic Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Xinyu Caii111111


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Xinyu Cai111111/Cybersex trafficking


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cybersex trafficking

Evaluate the drafted changes
The original article on Cybersex trafficking is already well put together and a good article. The article does show bias, but I think its very hard to prevent bias in the case of such a topic. Your work on the specific regions is well sourced and cited. There are a few grammatical issues in the East Asia section with singular/plural use, and a few more issues in the Europe section dealing with general wording. I could point them out to you specifically if you would like. The first sentence of the European section also has some confusing wording that could be fixed. Australia and Europe are good and neutral, but East Asia has an opinion at the end. The last sentence of the East Asia section expresses an opinion, which should be avoided on Wikipedia. Since this opinion is from the article being cited, you can say that the opinion is from the article, or you can reword the sentence not to express an opinion. Otherwise, very good work.