User:Xiyuanwu/Poverty in China/Echinacea10 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Xiyuanwu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Xiyuanwu/Poverty_in_China?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Poverty in China

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like reading your content as it discuss issue on women and poverty in China. I believe your contribution could address the content gap in the current article you are working on. In my opinion, your writing is neutral and give more information from the underrepresented community as you talk about sex, education, age, health and pay gap on your writing. However, I think you could provide citation in the first sentence on the second paragraph, as I it looks like the main point of the other sentences you explain after it. I also think that you could probably give one explanation sentence about marriage migration, before you begin to talk more about how women used it as a way to escape from poverty even though it is not always work like that. There are also some typos in the writing that you can double check again. I also suggest you to link some words on your article to another existed Wiki article or add images. Overall, I appreciate your work as it bring intersectionality lens to the article.