User:YH4DU/Iraq War/Aiapicco Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) YH4DU


 * Link to draft you're reviewing Editing User:YH4DU/Iraq War - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Iraq War - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Iraq War - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Nothing is wrong with the information you present. You just need a little more information in each section. Some of your sentences feel like there is missing information that could help wrap up your points. Your sentences also seem unfinished for example, when you say "The United States military has used the ammunition made from depleted Uranium during the Iraq war to pierce tank armour" I feel that you could add more to this by talking about how and when they made the ammunition which would complete the sentence transition into the next. and Also with your information you need to cite every time you say something so for example when you say "Throughout the warfare, the US military dispatched a massive number of fighter jets, dropping approximately 25000 tons of aviation bombs to the ground." there needs to be a citation at the end from an article in your reference page. If you don't know how to do it there's a bunch of tutorials. Also maybe a little more references that could back up your points. Just a little bit of grammar mistakes. Maybe add some information about how war effected the people to make your article more diverse. Overall your article does a great job talking about a lot of different environmental impacts of war in the area. It's easy to follow and is all relevant to the topic.