User:Yarelsu/Brandt's vole/Thidal1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Yarelsu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yarelsu/Brandt's_vole?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brandt's vole

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, the information added on the vole. I think the biggest thing that can be improved with this draft is the integration of information. The information used could be integrated a little better. I feel transitioning between the two pieces of information could help the flow of the paragraph. Overall I feel this draft is fine but could be worded a little better.


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there     anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that     described the subject in a clear way?

The information added is beneficial and added in a concise way.


 * 1) What changes would you suggest the author apply to     the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

I feel working on the transition a little between the information added would be beneficial.


 * 1) What's the most important thing the author could do     to improve the article?

I feel like working on the wording and flow is the biggest thing to improve


 * 1) Did you notice anything about the article you     reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? If so, what?

No


 * 1) Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order?     Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for     example)? Specifically, does the     information they are adding to the article make sense where they are putng     it?

It fits well where it is placed


 * 1) Is each section's length equal to its importance to     the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem     unnecessary? Is anything off-topic?

Overall, it seemed to be an appropriate length


 * 1) Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince     the reader to accept one particular point of view?

The article does not seem to try and draw conclusions.


 * 1) Are there any words or phrases that don't feel     neutral? For example, "the best idea," "most people,"     or negative associations, such as "While it's obvious that x, some     insist that y."

The words were neutral.


 * 1) Are most statements in the article connected to a     reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely     on blogs or self-published authors?

They are from reliable sources.


 * 1) Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or     two sources? If so, it may lead to an unbalanced article, or one that     leans too heavily into a single point of view.

The information is well balanced between the two sources.


 * 1) Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or     statements that you can't find stated in the references? Just because     there is a source listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately!

There are no unsourced statements.