User:Yautja199/Helots/FishMan312 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yautja199/Helots?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Helots

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead-

The lead in the main article looks good. Something that could potential make it the lead better is a photo of what a Helot warrior looked like and how they dressed next to the lead paragraph. Also, if it possible a time frame of when the Helots lived could be useful in the lead paragraph.

Content-

"In Greek military practice, the standard depth of the army's phalanx was eight men, having known this, Herodotus deducted that there was a soldier ratio of seven Helots to one Spartan at Plataea." I think a citation after this sentence is needed. I think a section that can be researched more is the "Helot Revolts" section because the information provided is vague with no background information.

Tone and Balance-

There is a neutral tone in the article. I do not feel pushed on views while reading.

Sources and References -

The reference of Peter Hunt and Helots at the Battle of Platea is a good source. Another source that may be useful is https://www.thegreatcoursesdaily.com/slaves-the-unsung-heroes-of-ancient-greece/. This is done by Robert Garland who has a PHD at Colgate University.

Organization-

The article seems to be organized well.

Images and Media -

I noticed the original article lacked images. I think a great way to contribute to the article is to bring in new images.