User:YawnChick/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Linglestown, Pennsylvania

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I grew up in Linglestown and attended schools in the area, so I believe the article was one that applied closely to my life, as I want to learn more about the area that I live in. The article is also start-class, so there is plenty of room for improvement.

Evaluate the article
-Lead Section

o   Choppy intro, use of “laid out” is too broad and does not seem professional

o   Poor picture of the town, will update

o   Update population to the current consensus, not 2010

-Content

o   Last paragraph of “history” section is confusing, needs to be revised

o   Can add information about the fire station

o   Make sure consensus information is parallel throughout the article

o   Add info about North Mountain Road

o   Check census to ensure demographics are correct

o   Add information to the “Schools “section about…

Nationally affiliated clubs

Green, White, Yellow for colors

-Tone and Balance

o   No bias or persuasion

o   Neutral article

o   Shares claims that the 4th of July weekend fireworks at Koons Park is a “mess”, needs to be taken out

-Sources

o   Reference census to ensure all demographics are up to date

o   Find reference for the middle school, does not have one ([when?])

School size has grown, update

o   Update when census was retrieved, still states it was retrieved in 2008, with information dating to the most recent census in 2020

o   Wide variety of sources

o   Dead link, delete (source #6)

o   Lots of Penn Live articles, ensure that the authors of articles are credible

-Organization

o   Relatively well written

o   Small grammatical issues that can be quickly fixed

Spelling

Comma errors

o   Notable person section is a bit confusing, not clear

o   Recreation needs edits (see above)

-Images

o   New picture is necessary, old and does not highlight the town

o  Shows Linglestown prior to construction project

o Could show this picture in the section where it highlights the construction, use new photo for main article cover

-Talk Page

o   Very little besides highlighting the dead article

o   No talk between Wikipedians

- Overall

o   Decent article, but spotty and needs support

o   Strong in discussing the towns history

o   Lots of holes and talking points that need filled (can concentrate on certain topics) easy edits to make from living in the area