User:Yessel Garcia/Rent regulation/Kjwonglam Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * Yessel Garcia
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Yessel Garcia/Rent regulation/Bibliography

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * No
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * Yes

Content evaluation
Content is solid!

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * There are a couple sentences that feel less neutral than the rest.
 * "Thus, areas that are predominantly filled with people of color are more susceptible and likely to need to fight for rent control because they have a history of being oppressed and now their cities are being targeted by capitalists who want to benefit from high rates of rent."
 * What are the areas susceptible to?
 * Possible reformatting: "Thus, areas that are predominantly filled with people of color are more susceptible [to ____]. This leads to a [continual] fight for rent control due to their history of oppression."
 * I'm struggling where to put "their cities are being targeted by capitalists who want to benefit from high rates of rent." This is the less neutral part of the sentence. Maybe you could reconfigure the sentence that begins "However, gentrification..." to say "which increases rent and enables landlords to benefit from high rates of rent, thus..."
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No

Tone and balance evaluation
Mostly neutral!

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes

Sources and references evaluation
Sources look good.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes! You could consider splitting up the paragraph, but it's good now as well.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Some phrasing:
 * "Often, those who need rent regulations or advocate for rent regulation are individuals who historically have been systematically and financially oppressed."
 * "This stems back...'New Deal' that created..."
 * "...redlining, and those who were in areas labeled as..."
 * "...'neighborhood effect,' which is the belief that..."
 * "During the years between 1998 and 2001" (remove "specifically")
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Where in the overall article would this section go?

Organization evaluation
Flow-wise, the content goes from historical to present well! Future/optional thing, but you can probably add links for terms like "redlining" and "neighborhood effect"!

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes, the current article doesn't talk about any of the issues or history brought up in your new content.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The added content gives a good overview of the impact of gentrification and the need for rent regulation in very understandable language.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * See above! Improved with some minor phrasing.