User:Yibofeng3/Marble/JaneYin Peer Review

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Janeyin

User:Yibofeng3/Marble Marble
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Clarity

The expanded content is clear. The four added aspects are essential parts missing from the current Wikipedia content. For example, its characteristics are crucial information for an article about the marble. Therefore, it is vital to present the features of calcite. The added content provides a clear and concise overview of the general characteristics of marble, which helps readers understand marble better. However, it would be good to add some data about marble. For instance, this part indicates the hardness of marble is very high. However, it does not show precisely how hard the marble is. If you can provide a specific hardness, this section will be rich.

The environmental impact section is also significant. This section provides information on the possible environmental impacts of marble mining. This part is clearly summarized.

Structure

The overall structure of the expanded content is complete and straightforward. The sentence structure is also entire, free of grammatical and spelling errors. However, it would be clearer if some sentences could be simplified. For example, the original text reads, “It is a very popular building material” replaced with “It is a prevalent building material.”

Balanced coverage

These four sections are summarized concisely. As a result, each section is about the same length.

Neutrality

The extension content is neutral and does not contain any biased content. In addition, the extended range fits the topic and only provides related information. For example, the Occupational Safety Section points out that marble processing can cause eye damage to personnel. Therefore, it is suggested that staff wear safety goggles during processing.

Source

The extension section has three valid sources, all with useful links. However, two citations are incorrectly formatted, one of which is a copy of the other. Therefore, the editor may need to re-edit the reference section.

Suggestions for improvement

To sum up, extended content is critical to Wikipedia's current marble information. The following suggestions hope to help enrich the extensions section.

1. A brief table can be added in the Feature section to show the relevant data of the marble, such as hardness. This can help the reader understand marble better.

2. In the Environmental impact section, some relevant pictures can be added to enrich this section.

3. Wikipedia sustainability links can be added to the Sustainability section to provide readers with more information on sustainability.

4. Editor also needs to check the formatting of the citations section before publication.