User:Yidanlong/Evaluate an Article

PAAS209
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Animal_Crossing

PAAS358
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Friends

PAAS209
The reason that I chose this article is Animal Crossing is one of my favorite video games. However, as an enthusiastic fan, I have never checked this on Wikipedia. So I'm interested in having more fun facts about it. My first impression is that the article is not as long as I expected. But there is a long Contents list so I assume this article would be informative.

PAAS358
The reason that I chose TikTok is that I spend lots of time on this app. I want to get more information about it. This application is developed by a Chinese Company, ByteDance, so I'm really curious about why this app is having such a big influence overseas. The first time I scroll down the TikTok wiki page, it's surprising that there is plain text only.

PAAS209
Part 1 Shortcomings

a. The first sentence does not mention any information related to the release time. Readers who want to take a quick look at the release time of the oldest or newest have to look at the right side chart, however, the first release and latest release are shown on the very bottom of the chart.

b."...the player character is a human who lives in a village inhabited by various anthropomorphic animals and can do various activities like fishing, bug catching, and fossil hunting..."

The game setting description in the leading section includes very complex words like anthropomorphic. It is hard to be understood by non-native English speakers. It confuses readers and they might need to search for that specific word once again.

c. "The series has been both critically and commercially successful and has sold over 60 million units worldwide."

In the second paragraph, the article refers to the success this game has accomplished. However, it only mentions there are 60 million of the game was sold. There is no data resource citation.

d. There are two different main types in this game, main series, and spin-off games. The article specifically lists the spin-off games only. However, in the Contents section, both types are mentioned. Even the main series are placed in front of the spin-off.

e. The game characters(section 1.1) do not have any corresponding images which can be confusing. The only picture in this article is the logo image in the introduction. None of the game-related pictures are shown in the content section.

f. The Gameplay part(section 1.2) is completely plain text. The important words are not bold or underlined. This can be hard for readers to follow all the way down to the end and to catch the main concepts.

g. The Gameplay part(section 1.2) is listing all the published game series. However, the majority of the list mentioned the main article except the last one. The last item on the gameplay list, Animal Crossing: New Horizons - Happy Home Paradise, does not include a website redirector which is different from all other 9 games. It should be all in the same form.

h. "Amiibo Festival was a critical and commercial failure;[34][54] in Japan, it only sold 87,872 copies"

In one of the game settings, Amiibo Festival, the article points out the failure of this setting. The evaluation criteria of how things were successful or failed were ambiguous. Refers to the article, only the selling amount is the reference condition. This conclusion is quite subjective.

i. "...a critical and commercial failure..." and "...both critically and commercially successful..." The same descriptive words are used twice. The word choice should be considered.

Part B Overall

a. The references part is great. There are lots of resources are listing.

b. All the topic listing in Contents are correspondently shown.

c. The resource is uptodate. The newest updates is on Jan 18 2022.

PAAS358
Part 1 Shortcomings

a.On the leading paragraph, there is a large portion tells how much Douyin is related to TikTok instead of Tiktok itself. Readers who wants to just learn about Tiktok have to go through the TikTok-Douyin relation part first. It seems like this article is about how these two application differents instead of talking about TikTok only.

b.The leading section is three paragraph long and over-detailed. Instead of shortly summarizing the following contents, the article tells a lot of information dispersedly.

c.The Evolution(section 1.1) put the majority of the portion on what celebrities are joining the TikTok. Which makes this article hard to catch reader's attention at very beginning of this article.

d."Cultural appropriation and imbalance in monetization for Black creators"(topic of section 6.7.2) "Content censorship and moderation by the platform"(topic of section 6.5) Topic like above is too long to read. A more short and descriptive headline would be better.

Part B Overall

a.The resource is uptodate. The newest updates is on Jan 17 2022.

b.There are lots of information about TicTok influece in other countries.

c.The reference list is long enough to prove the reliability of this article.The data used in argument sentences are well cited.