User:Yidanlong/LoveMustNotBeForgotten/Xvclvx Peer Review

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Yidanlong


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Lead:

The Lead is updated, and it appears the entry is created by the writer, without any other contributors yet. The Lead has some minor grammatical problems, but clearly states the issue of the story is one of love. The Lead, however, does not include a brief description of the article’s major sections. Although the Lead includes everything presented in the article, it is supported by two references, whereas the article itself has no references. The Lead is overly vague.

Content:

The content is relevant to the topic, because the content is a summary of the film, “Love Must Not be Forgotten”. The content is up-to-date. However, there is content missing. The viewpoints are all underrepresented because there lacks further description and outcome of each character’s actions. The plot simply states each person’s actions, but there lacks any reasoning that led to those actions. In addition, the grammar and spelling errors interfere with the understanding of the entry. One of the references is “Zhang Jie (Writer)”. The entry does not need to be cited in this manner. Instead, the author can use  to lead the readers to Zhang Jie’s page. Other than Zhang Jie’s page, there are no other links in the article. The article does not yet deal with one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps. Topics related to historically underrepresented populations are not addressed. The write-up focuses on the plot, theme, and characters of the film, instead of any ideological conflicts.

Tone and Balance:

The content material is neutral, and none of the claims is heavily biased toward a certain position. The content is mutual and does not stay the readers to take a position.

Sources and References:

The content is not backed up a reliable secondary source for information. In fact, there is a lack of references in the write-up. The content does not accurately reflect the cited sources, because the two sources are only mentioned in the Lead, but are not returned to in the rest of the article. The sources are not current and not thorough in terms of supporting the article. The sources lack a diverse spectrum of authors, and are more marginalized individuals. There are more and better sources available. The references do not support any claims in the article. Each fact is not supported by an appropriate, reliable references. References tend to be missing in this write-up. The source for Zhang Jie is Wikipedia, rendering this an in appropriate source. The other source is Wesleyan University Press, which is an appropriate academic source.

Organization:

The content is not well-written, due to spelling and grammatical issues that interfere with the understanding of the article. For example, there are too many pronouns. The content, however, is well-organized, in that it is broken down into small sections.

Images and Media:

The articles do not include any images or media. The author could consider adding these elements into the article.

Overall impressions:

The content does not improve the overall quality of the article. Since this is a new article, more aspects could be added to enrich it. The strength of the content added is that this is a promising start that expand the number of Wikipedia articles on Chinese films. The content could be improved by being more in-depth, with supporting links and examples.