User:Yidanlong/Operation Red Sea/Adambletcher Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

WeiLiu777, Yidan Long, Yige Liu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yidanlong/Operation_Red_Sea?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Operation Red Sea

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

-Your introduction sentence is an effective overview of the film, it could be more descriptive but this risks the conciseness of the lead

-The rest of the lead outlines the film's significant features and unique facts, like celebrating the 90th anniversary of the PLA

Content

-A detailed description of the characters of the film is very useful information for the wiki article

-Your descriptions could use more content, more descriptive and analytical information would improve the article

-You could include specific scenes significant to particular characters

Tone and Balance

-Your tone throughout the article is very neutral and narrative like

-I can not find any bias or misleading sections in your article

Sources and References

-Your content is adequately sourced with information being pulled primarily from your sources

-Although your sources are somewhat lacking in spectrum

-Mostly webpages, you could strengthen your atricle with some more academic sources like journal articles, although it may be hard to incorporate this information into your current sub topics

Organization

-Content is very clear and direct

-Sentences are somewhat basic, lack depth or descriptive elements

-Use of sub topics create a clear and easy to read article

Images and Media

-I think you could add some images to your article

-Screen captures of the characters when you're discussing them

-Photos of the composers when discussing the music of the film

Overall I like the status of your article, I think with some extra work to beef up the sections and some final edits to sentence structure will produce an excellent article. Alongside some additional media, such as images.