User:Yiding wang/The Eight Hundred/Darianoy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Assigned to: Chengzhenli, Bruceyyds, Zhihan li


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yiding%20wang/The_Eight_Hundred?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Eight Hundred

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The Eight Hundred

Looking at the lead by itself, do I feel satisfied that I know the importance of the topic?

This lead is a synopsis, I think this group is misunderstood the meaning of lead.

Looking at the lead again after reading the rest of the article, does the lead reflect the most important information?

This lead did not reflect the most important information.

Does the lead give more weight to certain parts of the article over others? Is anything missing? Is anything redundant?

Except the misunderstanding, the writing of this lead is like used the machine translation.

Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)?

This article only have three sections, lead and plot are actually talking about one theme. The cast section is too simple.

Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic?

The plot part is full of tedious details and weird word selection.

For example: "The film is narrated in the sky, narrating the daily battles. "

Does the article reflect all the perspectives represented in the published literature? Are any significant viewpoints left out or missing?

This article did not have any published literature.

Missed important viewpoints.

Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?

This article did not have conclusions and point of views.

Do you think you could guess the perspective of the author by reading the article?

No, this article is neutral.

Does the article make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people? For example, "some people say..."

This article is more like a synopsis.

Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors?

No, this article has one source rely on a unreliable website and two sources rely on the news websites.

Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you can't find stated in the references? Just because there is a source listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately!

Actually, this article did not put the citation link in the website.

Need to proofreading and revise again.

Also, the punctuations and italics should be careful.