User:Yiyao Sun (Sophia)/Art/KatrinaBaldeo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Yiyao Sun (Sophia)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Art
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Current version of the article does not exist - editing is still occurring.

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead Section:

- I do not notice any edits made by my peer as of yet. However, the lead section seems to grasp the overall content presented throughout the article. It is concise but it is being flagged. This is due to it being too brief, the lead section should be expanded to properly summarize all key elements proposed throughout the text. This is something my peer should consider when editing the article.

- The lead section does include an introductory sentence, involving the major points in the article. However, there is a lack of the "brief description" of these major points. I feel this should be a central focus in the editing process.

- the lead is focused on the main sections presented throughout the article, and does not include anything not mentioned in the body text.

- the lead is concise; however, it may be too concise. The editor should focus on elaborating on the major points to create a better, well-rounded summary of ideas presented in the article.

Content:

- I would say the included content is extremely relevant to the broad category of "art". There are many sections, involving the overview, history, forms, genre, media and styles, purpose, public access, controversies, theory, classification disputes, and finally art and law. These themes encompass the overarching theme of "art" in all major senses of the term.

- there is a vast mix of references gathered from varying dates and times. I would say many sections necessitate older references, such as the history portion. However, there could be an inclusion of more recent events involving art. I see a recent reference from 2020. Yet, there has been many different instalments and events in art since then. As such, there is room for improvement in this section.

- I feel like all the presented content is valuable for the encompassing theme of "art". However, some sections seem very brief compared to other sections. This mainly being the art and law portion. This could definitely benefit from elaboration into art law and specific and recent instances of art and law.

- The equity gap primarily presented within this article would relate to the inclusion of Indigenous art, specifically the Navajo. I believe the inclusion of indigenous art remains essential for the "art" article. However, this inclusion is fairly brief and not expanded upon as much as it could be. This remains an area of potential elaboration throughout the edition process.

Tone and Balance:

- The content added throughout the article maintains a neutral and unbiased account of the presented categories. There are no flags by Wikipedia, or blatantly critical language used within the article.

- I would say there seems to be more dominance of western arts; however, I recognize the inclusion of eastern, middle-eastern, and indigenous art that is mixed into the article.

- The viewpoints seem to be balanced in that it remains neutral.

- there is no persuasive language that I noticed throughout the article. It seems to be well-rounded and positioned in an informative stance.

Sources and References:

- All the content presented is referenced, with an extensive reference section that involves varying secondary sources.

- In analyzing what the sources describe, I can concur that the written article includes what the sources say and is reinforced by them.

- The reference page is extensive and thorough, it involves literature relating to the sub-categories presented in the article, from varying dates and times, and by many authors.

- although some sources are not current, I feel this is necessary for many of the sub-categories presented in the article. However, more recent sources could be found for improving the recency of information and detailing recent cases.

- There is a diverse spectrum of authors included in the references. Many of these authors are also contributing to the equity gap because they themselves are minorities, and discuss the art categories of eastern regions.

- Many of the sources appear to be from academic journals, such as JSTOR. Because of this, the information can be viewed as more reliable.

- in investigating the presented links, many of them work. However, many are blocked by a pay wall, making the information more elitist and unavailable for everyday people.

Organization:

- There has yet to be any additions made to the chosen article. The talk page has no edits or discussion of edits by my peer.

- Because of this, there are no grammatical errors. However, this was how the article was originally.

- The original form of the article organizes the sub-categories in a flowing way that makes it easy to read. I hope my peer can add to this and maintain this flow.

Images and Media:

- Because there has been no formal edits or discussions of edits, there have been no additional images. However, if there were I would be inspecting for the appeasement of Wikipedia standards involving copyright laws.

This is not a new article, as my peer has chosen to improve on an existing article.

Overall Impressions:

- overall I believe there are a few aspects that my peer can include to improve the nature of the article. This primarily being the expansion on Indigenous voices in art and art history, additionally, the improvement of more recent sources and cases to highlight the sub-categories or art theories presented in the article. The lead section would also benefit from elaborating on the body paragraphs of the article, specifically the main themes and their definitions. These additions can ultimately strengthen the article and provide a stronger fulfillment of equity gaps in the process. This would improve the readers experience and knowledge in reading this article.