User:Yk0302/User:Doublebassplayerv/Melvin Dunlap/Kosenrufu2030 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) User:Yk0302/User:Doublebassplayerv/Melvin Dunlap


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Doublebassplayerv/Melvin Dunlap


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Melvin Dunlap

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The article has a good lead section that is concise and it gives us a sense what is to be discussed in the article. There is not a description of the article's major section, however, most articles do not include this.

Much of the content added is very much relevant to the topic and it is up-to-date. There seems to be a few details missing from his musical upbringing. Is there any information about training? I assume that there is not much information on this but wanted to ask anyway. This article obviously deals with Wikipedia's equity gap. It is great to read information regarding this musician and his work with these amazing artists.

The overall content is neutral and unbiased.

For your lead section sentences, you might want to cite those. From what I see with a lot of articles, you might want to cite every sentence.

There seems to be some great sources here - current and diverse. The links also work.

Oh, did any of these albums win any particular awards - Grammys, American Music Awards, etc? You might be able to include those in your discography.

I thought that the article was easy to read. Not many grammatical or spelling errors here but you will always continue to revise and fix things up to the last moment.

Great job!