User:Yk0302/User:Doublebassplayerv/Melvin Dunlap/Yk0302 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)Doublebassplayerv


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Doublebassplayerv/Melvin_DunlapLinks to an external site.
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Melvin_DunlapLinks to an external site.
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Melvin_DunlapLinks to an external site.

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Nice work with adding discography and biography with good amount of sources. I like the "equipment" section. Lead section was concise and easy to understand. Lead section says he is a composer. I wish there was composition section in Discography and described what tunes he wrote as a composer. Also it could divide the structure of Discography in to two parts such as "work as sidemen" and "leader."

Concerning the structure of the article body, I wish it specified the time period of his career on each paragraph. Also it could add the wikipedia links for artists and terms mentioned in the article such as "Bill Withers", "Charles Write", "Justin Timberlake", and equipments.