User:Ylim4/Earlimart Pesticide Poisoning/Cleefin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ylim4, Ethanwon14


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ylim4/Earlimart_Pesticide_Poisoning?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The content created for the new Earlimart Pesticide Poisoning article is consise and accurate when it comes to the incident. The information provided is neutral and unbiased as well as academically informed when describing what specific chemicals were present during the poisoning. The only thing missing from the draft is the community response to the incident, but that will be filled in soon. This article could benefit from a brief background on who the UFW are and potentially some original accounts from the pesticide poisoning. None of the content added attempts to persuade the reader in any shape or form. Information is neatly organized and formatted in a way that makes it easy to read.

A few things that the draft of this article needs are sources and references, to prove that the information provided is accurate and credible. The lack of images will make the article very bland, so related imagery will always be a plus. Another addition should be links to other related articles so that people can be more informed when learning about topics with wider scope. Overall this article is fairly good in its current stage, but needs some sources and extra information to make it a complete article. The information already provided is solid and just needs a public response and impact sections added to wrap it up.