User:YoBenAgain/Paula (Supercell Community Manager)/Patriciatrinidad19 Peer Review

Whose work are you reviewing?
User:YoBenAgain

Link to draft you're reviewing

 * User:YoBenAgain/Paula (Supercell Community Manager)

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
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Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - So far, the lead reflects the content you have discussed throughout your article. For instance, you mention a couple of times that Paula is very active in the gaming sphere and that she often cosplays different video game characters. I am also glad that you remembered to update your lead every time you added new information to your article. For example, I noticed that towards the end of your article, you wrote that Paula is currently a community manager for Squad Busters, a game run by Supercell, and then you went ahead and mentioned this important detail in your lead.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? - Your lead section also introduces your article's major sections, which is great, but the only section that I felt was missing from it was Paula's personal/educational background.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? - I think your lead does a good job of letting us know who Paula is and what she is currently doing in terms of work.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? - Your lead section does a great job of addressing the main details of your article. I think your lead provides all the necessary information on this person.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? - Overall, I think your lead does a nice job of setting the stage for what is to come in your article because you go straight to the point and are very thorough.

Content

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? - I think the content you added is relevant to your topic. It is mentioned that Paula's university experience led her to discover that she was interested and passionate about gameplay. I think details like this give us a sense of why Paula pursued gaming as a career. This is a smooth transition into the rest of your article, which discusses her journey in working at different developing companies and pursuing many creative endeavors.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - I am unsure as there are no website links that help me determine the up-to-dateness of this information.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - Something that you could add is information on Paula's Youtube channel/Twitch account--like what she is posting or updating on there? OR... Since she works as a community manager, do you happen to know some projects that she is currently involved in?
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? - No, it does not.

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? - From what I have read, your article's content is written in a neutral perspective.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? - To me, there are no claims that are biased; the majority of the article is just detailing Paula's involvement in gaming and how she has explored many career roles in gaming.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? - I don't think so.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? - The content added does not make the reader favor one position. This article mainly informs you about Paula's career choices and work experience.

Sources and References

 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - I did not see any sources or references in your article draft. However, I checked your bibliography page, and you had several links listed there.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? - https://time.news/spanish-paula-leaves-brawl-stars-to-lead-another-supercell-game/ (This link reflects a major section of your article that talks about how Paula left the Brawl Stars Supercell game and shifted her focus to another one of their games, Squad Busters.)
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? - Most of the sources I have seen on your bibliography are not independent sources as they come directly from Paula's Youtube channel, and Instagram and LinkedIn page. However, the "Time News" article does cover some content that my you discussed.
 * Are the sources current? - I looked at most of your different sources and saw that they were current. The majority of them, if not all, were from 2023.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? - Most of the sources are from Paula's official websites.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? - The sources you used are from LinkedIn, Instagram, and Youtube, which are not the most credible sources. The question asks if there "better sources," but I am unsure whether you can find peer-reviewed articles for this topic. Try looking through this database: https://csu-sfsu.primo.exlibrisgroup.com/discovery/search?vid=01CALS_SFR:01CALS_SFR&lang=en.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? - The links work.

Organization

 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? - Yes, you did a wonderful job providing sentences that were straightforward and easy to read.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? - As I read through your article, I noticed that there were a few grammatical errors, but nothing too major. I think you can adjust those minor mistakes once you are in the editing stage.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? - The article reads smoothly, but something that will help make it more organized is adding headers. I think you should focus on formatting the sections because once you add them, you can move your content into the appropriate areas. Also, a model article can be helpful in guiding you in this process. Check out this one: PewDiePie.

Images and Media

 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? - You do not have any images in your article just yet, but I suggest you add one of Paula at the right side and also insert a personal infobox like the one for Dream (YouTuber) or PewDiePie. If you reference Dream or PewDiePie's Wikipedia page, I think you will have a solid article. Also, since you mentioned different places where Paula worked, for each workplace, you could add an image of it.

For New Articles ONLY

 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? - I think this article will need more sources that are independent of the subject so that it could meet Wikipedia's notability criteria.
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? - Your list of sources mainly consist of Paula's Youtube content, so you may want to explore sources outside of that. For example, look through Google or our school's database.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? - Since your article is of someone who could be considered a gamer or internet personality, I suggest you look through Dream (YouTuber) or PewDiePie's Wikipedia page so that you can reference their articles while working on yours.
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? - Yes, this article could be linked to Supercell games (Supercell (video game company)) as Paula currently works for them.

Overall Impressions

 * Overall, you did a good job on your article draft! I think one of your biggest strengths is that you were consistently writing sentences that were concise and understandable to read. Another strength is that you wrote the entire article from a neutral perspective, which aligns with one of Wikipedia's pillars. Something that you can improve on is finding sources that are independent of the subject. You should find sources that come from websites that Wikipedia considers credible because it will increase the notability of your article.