User:Youngdn99/Bullying/Lindasreyes Peer Review

Peer review

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Overall evaluation
This draft overall is very informative and brings new information to attention. I would suggest creating separate paragraphs when talking about a new topic - The research done in London, the risks of bullying would benefit if separated to make it less confusing to readers.

This article could also benefit from adding more studies from other countries and use it as a comparative. Towards the end of the draft - the mention of "greater attention needs to be paid to factors that will lower the risk" is brought to attention. The article touches on this briefly - however it seems to be mostly American Based - adding other information for what other other countries have done to prevent bullying would be helpful. The article links sites for prevention but does not list any other existing factors.

This has also used many sources, which shows validating work and proper accuracy to the work being added. All sources are correctly working verifying that they are legitimate.