User:Yousra1003/Wafa Ghnaim/Jazhar Peer Review

General info
I am reviewing Yousra1003's article on Wafa Ghnaim.
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Yousra1003/Wafa Ghnaim
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Does not exist.

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
 * The lead has been updated to the new content added by Yousra.
 * The lead clearly describes the article's topic, which is Wafa Ghnaim as an Palestinian-American author, curator, and activist promoting the Palestinian heritage.
 * The lead includes a brief description of the article's major sections, which mentions her background and main premise of the article, her book, "Tatreez & Tea: Embroidery & Storytelling in the Palestinian Diaspora."
 * An existing Wikipedia article is not available for Wafa Ghnaim, so all information is up-to-date in her current article.
 * The lead is concise and effectively summarizes the article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * The content added is relevant to the topic of Ghnaim preserving her Palestinian heritage through art and embroidery. "Ghnaim's passion for preserving Palestinian cultural heritage is evident in her book. The book explores the significance of tatreez as a form of storytelling and cultural expression within the Palestinian diaspora, shedding light on the historical and social context of this traditional art form." In this sentence, it is clear that Ghnaim is passionate about art and storytelling and is motivated to preserving the Palestinian heritage, so it is relevant and emphasizes her work.
 * There is no content that appears to be missing, and all the information pertains to Ghnaim and her work.
 * The article address historically underrepresented topics, mainly highlighting Palestinian heritage. The sentence, "Ghnaim has dedicated her career to documenting and sharing the rich history and traditions of the Palestinian people, with a particular focus on the art of tatreez, or embroidery," shows that she is supporting and working towards the preserving Palestinian heritage. This quote and the article both represent the cultural heritage of Palestinian heritage, which is an underrepresentation.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * The content added appears to be neutral. There are no areas of the article that point to a biased research process. In the following sentence from the article, "Wafa Ghnaim is a Palestinian-American author, curator, and activist known for her work in preserving and promoting Palestinian cultural heritage, particularly through the art of embroidery," there is no bias and straight to point.
 * The article only talks about Ghnaim promoting her cultural heritage and her inspiration from her parents in writing her book. The claims are not heavily biased toward a particular position or topic.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No, the content added does not persuade the reader in favor or against one position as it is an informational article, focusing on Ghnaim's work.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * All new content is backed up by a reliable secondary source of information. The sources incorporated are taken from the library's database. In the sentence, "Ghnaim currently resides in New York, but grew up in Milwaukie, Oregon where she also graduated from Milwaukie High School in 2001," there is a date so using a source to back this piece of information up would be a great idea. A citation for this would be good for credibility purposes., "Ghnaim’s book, “Tatreez & Tea: Embroidery & Storytelling in the Palestinian Diaspora,” was heavily influenced by her mother who wanted to write a book on the importance of Palestinian embroidery."
 * The content accurately reflect what the cited sources say as they are paraphrased and summarized, providing information related to her topic.
 * The sources used are thorough and reflect the available literature on the topic that reflect Ghnaim's efforts in promoting her heritage through art.
 * The sources are current, ranging from years 2016-2023, highlighting her most recent works.
 * The sources are not necessarily written by a diverse spectrum of authors or historically marginalized individuals where possible. The sources include a segment from NPR, a reviews from the News publication, an article from the Washington Report, and a well-known fashion magazine. However, these sources provides additional information on Ghnaim's interest in tatreez and her use of tatreez in Palestinian history.
 * The incorporated sources offer historical reference for tatreez, art, and embroidery used from the database.
 * The links work upon opening them.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * The content added is well-written, concise, and easy to read.
 * There are no grammatical or spelling errors.
 * The content added is well-organized and broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic. However, headings for paragraphs are helpful if incorporated to make it easier for readers to engage in the article.

Images and Media
Guiding questions:


 * My peer has not added any images or media in the article.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * The article is supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject and meets the Wikipedia's notability requirements.
 * The list of sources are exhaustive and accurately represent all available literature on the subject. The sources include news reports, well-known magazines, and publications.
 * The article follows the patterns of other similar articles and contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles.
 * The article links to other articles so it is more discoverable.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * The content has added improved the overall quality of the article and looks more complete. It explains Ghnaim's book, her backgound, education, and her promoting her heritage through art.
 * The strengths are that the article seems to be clear and concise with a breakdown of paragraphs, making it easier for me to read. The article includes citations and references so that is a good addition to jump from one reference to the other.
 * The content can be improved by adding headings to each paragraph and making the first paragraph of the article body shorter because it seemed to be a bit difficult to pinpoint where i was reading from.