User:Ysof011/Black Joy Museum/Rscaggs02 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ysof011


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ysof011/Black_Joy_Museum?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * none

Evaluate the drafted changes
Top section:

- need to embolden Museum of Black Joy (title)

- Is it Black Joy Museum or Museum of Black Joy -> title should be more clear

- Try not to use language that isn't neutral i.e.: "The museum's homepage includes uplifting phrases such as "You are beautiful," "

Creator/Curator section:

- Try using more neutral language that is less story like: " 2020 would prove to be a tragic year, not only due to the some 345,000 deaths due to COVID-19"

- Only talk about what Walls has done, not what she hopes/hoped to do: "Hoping to counter the pain and sadness experienced by the Black community, Walls wanted the museum to be a source of healing and happiness,[16] describing the digital experience as "counter-programming"

Exhibitions and Artwork:

- The [5] citation can go at the end of the sentence one time I believe, instead of after each artwork title.

Afternote: This will come later in the publishing process but just a note that the checklist mentions "At least one related Wikipedia article links back to this one."