User:Yuanmao1118/Su Manshu/SkinnyTracy Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Yuanmao1118
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Yuanmao1118/Su Manshu

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? yes
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? yes "Su Man-shu (Su Jian, Hsüan-ying, Su Manshu) (1884-1918) was a writer, poet, painter, revolutionist, translator, and monk. "
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? only have two paragraph, hard for me to say
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? no
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? concise but needs more on what he accomplished as a person

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? no
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? no

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? yes content added neutral
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? no
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? no
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? no

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? NA
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? NA
 * Are the sources current? NA
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?NA
 * Check a few links. Do they work?NA

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? "Su Man-she was born out of wedlock in Yokohama in 1884." should be Su Man-Shu
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? not really needs more improvment

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? no
 * Are images well-captioned? no
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? no
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? no

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? it is more complete but I am still confused what this guy actually accomplished
 * What are the strengths of the content added? added more background on painting and writing career
 * How can the content added be improved? could have a more clear structure / could use a format such as before 1st monk time/ before 2nd monk time/ 3rd monk time and reader could have a easier understanding about his reasons behind these decision back and forth.