User:Yuanting Wang 03/Junk food/Hadis07 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Yuanting Wang 03)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Yuanting Wang 03/Junk food


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Junk food

Evaluate the drafted changes
To start you don't need to fill out the section at the bottom of the sandbox as you are just editing/reviewing to the Junk Food article. You should just provide the sections that you are going to edit and a rough draft of what you want to add.

Lead Section:

For the lead section of your sandbox draft it looks like you've put the names of the authors of you're using as references. A lead section is more so an introduction to the topic and the article that the reader is about to engage with.

Article body:

Id recommend you start drafting out what you're going to add to the article, I see you already have some references so maybe start to pull some information out of those that you think is missing from the page. You should be aiming for 200-250 words ish (700 words for the whole group). I would actually write more and then review and redact words as I often find I can make my sentences more concise, which is an important element of wikipedia.

References:

I took a look at your references article and thought it was great, as long as you are able to interpret the information into something more accessible to the average wikipedia user. You should may be also find some article type resources to help fill out the rest of your word count.

Hope this helps, good luck :)