User:YummyPanda/Diseases of poverty/Ebeutter Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

YummyPanda, Mkaur8 and Yh2256


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Diseases of poverty
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Diseases of poverty

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, the edits made to the "diseases of poverty" page are really well done. Starting from the beginning of the article, I appreciate the specific content added to the mental health section with appropriate use of citations. I am not entirely sure if there was an air pollution section before or if you added it in, but I really appreciate its inclusion. I also really appreciate the obesity section's clear discussion of the impacts of food desserts and healthcare access and clear explanation that disparities in obesity rates are not due to individual behavior. My only constructive feedback would be to simplify the wording of some sections/sentences for clarity and conciseness. But overall, your edits are wonderful additions to the article!