User:YumoLu/Feminist Archaeology/Isaacsj3 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Yumo!

I really like the content you're adding to the Feminist Archaeology article--particularly about the methodology and focus of BFA. Although, I think that there are parts where it could flow better/extraneous language is used. Sometimes the antecedents of "it" when you're writing is unclear, and I think you could be more specific when addressing how "Black Feminist Archaeology has the potential to diversify the questions asked and knowledge produced in archaeology." Particularly, what questions can be asked? What knowledge is gained with BFA, and what is lost in its absence? Also, totally different, but I think if the entire paragraph is from a single source, you're allowed to just put the [1] at the end! That should save some time.

If you're talking about the hermitage, it might be cool to involve information about artifacts (kind of like activity 2) and discuss how BFA interprets them and draws out humanity. I think, overall, this part of BFA links to the next section on household studies and you should consider if there's a way to link them.

For the feminist archaeology section:

"Some archaeologists" is pretty vague and could do with some examples/citations. The section about maritime archaeology seems slightly misplaced in that there isn't much mention of what marginalized information it ignores. I think if you just add information from the paper you cite there, you'll be in great shape!

I really like all the information you have here. Good job!