User:Zabalene/Ophiocoma scolopendrina/Purnimav Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

user: Zabalene


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Sandbox Draft- Ophiocoma scolopendrina


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Article Page

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi! Your article is really well written especially in an objective and purely observational manner. There's a few format errors such as under Distribution, the m^2 so maybe try rechecking and proofreading it once more after you've copy pasted your work into the live space. Some sentences can be a little underwhelmingly short in comparison to others and I think it might disrupt the flow of the paragraph. Maybe merging some smaller sentences together so you don't have a lot of "They live... They have... They are..." but in general the terms used are very precise and specific and I think it conveys a lot of information in an easy to understand way for all audiences which is great! I definitely think your article has given me an example of amazing wiki writing and I'll be sure to edit my work in the same way!

Content-wise, I think you're just missing a Lead Paragraph but i think you have all the information except its formatted into very specific categories so I suggest maybe merging things that don't have much information and including an overall description in the Lead. I think you could accomplish this by merging distribution and habitat and including a general sentence to describe that category in your Lead Paragraph.