User:Zachary Wang114514/Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis First Nation/Mjshoe Peer Review

Lead

Guiding Questions:


 * The lead’s been updated to reflect new content added by the writer. The details described are more relevant to the basic information about the tribe.
 * The lead includes an introductory sentence that concisely describes the article's topic. However, I would directly state that the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis are a Native tribe to make the concept easier to grasp for people with limited knowledge on Native peoples.
 * The lead could better reflect the article’s major sections. The lead doesn’t include anything in regards to the “challenges” or “governance” paragraphs. The “culture and economy” section is well reflected in the lead, but I’d perhaps change some of the verbage to more clearly communicate a point about the economy. Perhaps something about their subsistence lifestyle would be a good thing to include, as it indirectly speaks on their tribal economy.
 * The lead only includes information that is relevant to the article’s information.
 * The lead is concise and effectively communicates a general understanding of the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis for Wikipedia readers.

Content

Guiding Questions:


 * The content that’s been added to the article is highly relevant to the topic.
 * The content added to the article is up-to-date, with a majority of its information coming from the official Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis tribal website.
 * I don’t believe that there’s any content missing. The person who currently has already published their information on the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis included reservation locations, which is something that I otherwise would’ve recommended to add. However, I think that the challenges paragraph, while it includes relevant information, is a bit misplaced. I think it’d be better represented in the culture and economy paragraph because a paragraph dedicated to the troubles that the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis encounter, particularly without any specific examples, comes across as an attempt to evoke pity on those who read the article.
 * The article is a step in addressing Wikipedia’s equity gaps. There was a large gap of information on an indigenous tribe, the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis prior to Zachary’s edits. The article makes a particular effort to speak about tribal language, which is something that is a largely unrepresented topic.

Tone and Balance

Guiding Questions:


 * Overall, the content added is written in a neutral tone. As previously mentioned, I would recommend rethinking about the verbage and organization of the challenges paragraph, though.
 * None of the claims made in Zachary’s article appear to be heavily biased towards a particular position.
 * There aren’t any viewpoints that are overrepresented or underrepresented.
 * The content added doesn’t attempt to sell a perspective, or veer a reader a reader away from certain positions.

Sources and References

Guiding Questions:


 * All new information is backed up by a reliable secondary source. The encyclopedia source, similar to Wikipedia, is a compilation of information. But, I believe it to be a credible source because the sources utilized to formulate the article are almost entirely from universities.
 * The content written in the article accurately reflects the information that can be found in the cited sources.
 * The sources that Zachary utilizes are thorough.
 * The date of recent publication for the encyclopedia article is unavailable, and despite the mentioning that it’s been updated, no specific time frame is apparent. The other resource that Zachary utilizes is the official tribal website of the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis, which I would assume holds the most recent and relevant information.
 * One of the sources is the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis tribe, which is great, considering some accounts on Native tribes aren’t necessarily fact checked by the actual group that they are speaking about. Otherwise, the only other source listed is the encyclopedia article. So, I’d encourage the implementation of a broader array of sources.
 * I think that Zachary has a good start with sources, but there are definitely other resources that exist which are from government sites, and non-profits which have documented their interactions with the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis, which could be helpful.
 * All of the links work.

Organization

Guiding Questions:


 * The content that’s been added by Zachary is well-written, and clearly understood.
 * The content doesn’t appear to have any grammatical or spelling errors.
 * The content is well-organized and is broken down into concrete sections that are relevant and highly important to the topic.

Images and Media

Guiding Questions:


 * There aren’t any images for me to write about.

Overall Impressions

Guiding Questions:


 * The article is most definitely more complete with Zachary’s edits. Prior to the update, the article only had a lead and tribal reservation locations, so a major gap in content has been filled.
 * The content added important features that are necessary in describing a group of people, including sections about culture, language, struggles, and economic background. Overall, the article gives a good overview of who the Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis are, and tribal features to distinguish them, in a concise, easily understandable fashion.
 * The content added could perhaps be improved with a section on people who are prominent in the tribe. It’d perhaps expand readers understanding of tribal structure, and identify some societally, well-known figures to further enhance  Ḵwiḵwa̱sut'inux̱w Ha̱xwa'mis representation.

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