User:Zafallen/Evolution of Feline Immunodeficiency Virus/Athanasius22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zafallen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Zafallen/Evolution of Feline Immunodeficiency Virus


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The author has a clear and balanced lead section that places equal emphasis on the origins, structure, and nature of the topic. The topic is discussed in a logical order based on the lead section, and the any theories are properly introduced via reliable sources such as Science. These theories are also based on scientific methods rather than conjecture alone. The content remained neutral and easy to understand, and the sections were as balanced as the lead section. They successfully elaborated on the lead section, but the genetic structure section could have benefitted from data concerning HIV or other retroviruses or a see also section. This could serve as a comparison between FIV and HIV, and it could link the first two body sections. An image of FIV could be helpful if it is available; it could help the reader visulaize and understand the virus. The links for the sources work, and the author doesn't persuade the reader.