User:Zarenr97

Hi! My name is Danielle Wenger and I am in Chem 153A with you. Here are my recommendations for potential edits before the final draft is due:

Rephrase so that this statement is clearer: “Anne's work could be used to figure out how pathogens are able to evade termination by the immune system which could be applied toward understanding how this occurs in fetuses.”

Change “As” to “After” in the sentence: “As she was awarded her PhD in 1975 her doctoral supervisor, Howard R. Morris, moved to Imperial College London as a lecturer in biochemistry and brought Dell with him.”

Expand more on her early life, since only one sentence right now. Maybe just one or two more sentences?

What were her scientific contributions? Need more information on what she discovered and discussion of her key published papers. (Can be put after what is already written in the Education and research section)

Potentially add a section titled “Key Papers” before the bibliography?

Best,

Danielle

Peer Review from Weiye:
I think the organization and language is nice and clear overall. I noticed from the history view that some changes were done by other editors, so I am simply commenting on the article as a whole instead of focussing on your part of work. Here are some of my suggestions and comments:
 * Was there a picture of her before? I saw in the edit history that you added a picture but it's not there now. The information box has great information, but it would be definitely better if a picture of her can be added. If there's copyright issue or anything like that for the previous one, I would encourage you still to try getting a valid picture of her uploaded.


 * I notice that throughout the article, both her first name and last name were used to refer to her. I personally think that it would be better if only her first name or last name is used for unity, and I would use last name to show respect.
 * By "a degree in chemistry", do you mean a B.S. degree? It might be better to clarify this.
 * I don't think "awarded" is an appropriate word for getting a PhD degree. It sounds a bit too casual. I would probably say something like "she earned her PhD".
 * The link for her supervisor Morris is invalid. Maybe you want to try adding an external link to Morris's personal page (if any) rather than a wikipedia page link.
 * I'd like to see more information on some specific achievements or progresses she made in her field. One way I can think of to do this is to add annotations to the bibliography. So instead of simply listing her papers, maybe add some introduction or abstract from her papers to give the readers an overview of what she did with some detailed information.
 * Another quick note: should the reference section go after the bibliography or before it? I personally feel that reference list would come last (before external links of course) but I'm not sure about this.

Anne Dell  Australian Biochemist specializing in Glycomics

New Reasearch

Reviews

Bibliography

Planned changes

Hello Wikipedia community I plan on expanding Anne Dell's page by adding some of her new research, reviews, and add more to the bibliography section.

Antiparallel (biochemistry)

Backbone chain

For above articles there is not enough left to add.

Annie May Hurd Karrer

Lotte Strauss

Anne Dell

Either of the pages for scientists has room for expansion of their scientific contribution

Side chain

Relatively generic page so not much else to add.