User:Zatayl/Gender policing/BrittanyFreimann Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cabranc, Lewelch and Zatayl.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Gender policing
 * - Currently, this group hasn't made any viewable updates, which is completely fine. So I will be reviewing the original article itself.
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gender policing

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- I think the lead is a good intro to this article. It gives enough information that a person can read it an understand what Gender Policing is without having to read the rest of the article. However, It has some key concepts that are further analyzed later in the article. So if someone was interested in learning more, this paragraph opens the floor to the subject, then gives more explanation later on.

- I don't think the lead needs to be edited any further. You could add more but it's already a good length so I would recommend leaving it as is. But If you did decided to add more, it wouldn't be a bad thing. It's kind of just up to what particular information you would want to add and whether it would be necessary.

Content

- There is a lot of content in this article. It can be somewhat overwhelming. However, I can see why it can all be needed. Each section gives relevant information that helps give more context to the development and definition of Gender Policing. The article could probably use some more modern information. I feel like a lot of the information is older, which is still very important, but I feel like there has to be some modern context that can be added in. However, I would be carful adding to this page. Like I said, it is already kind of crowded and adding too much more could make it too long. Just keep it informative and to the point.

Tone and Balance

- The tone is very neutral which is great. I don't feel like it was promoting one side or another. It just felt educational which is perfect. This article can be tricky because I feel like it's very easy to fall to one side or the other. There are a lot of instances where you have to point out the obvious oppression or thoughts of society during a specify time period. This article takes all of this into consideration and stays on neutral ground. They tell the ways of society and the oppression people faced but there is no underlying meaning or push towards a certain view point. If your group decides to add anything to this article, make sure you write your content within this same context.

Sources and References

- No new sources yet since they haven't updated their sandbox. I didn't go through all the sources on the original page, however, a few that I clicked on to check, didn't work. I was taken to a page that said no results found. So I would probably go through all of them and either update or delete sources that are no longer available. Then, make sure you check the cited material and see if you can find a new source to back it up or revise the material so it a lines with another source.

Organization

- The article seems to be organized in a good way. I think it allows the information to flow easily though out. I really like how the socialization category was divided up into three sub categories to better explain it. I also like how they have a new column to write about Transgender people. This was something that needed to be address and I'm glad it the topic received it's own section.

Images and Media

- There are no images or media in this article. I think maybe attempting to add one or two images could be helpful. Visuals help a lot when reading a long article like this one. It allows the brain to take a quick pause to take in the image. Adding something to this article will help. Make sure you add good captions as well as adhering to all copyright regulations.

Overall Impressions

- Overall I think this article is pretty good but obviously there is room for improvement. I think adding images, going though the sources to insure they are working and maybe even adding a section regarding gender and race, might be some good additions to this article. I would highly recommend taking a look at the talk page for this article. There are a lot of useful tips and recommendations on this page that could help when editing this article. Good luck everyone!