User:Zcc002/Bordetella/Zh0005 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Zcc002)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zcc002/Bordetella?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bordetella

Evaluate the drafted changes
I can see that the article was in need of major editing. I like that I can see what corrections you did in your sandbox so that the article could flow well. I was confused on whether the corrections were just part of the lead section or if you copied only the few parts of the whole article that needed correction. It would be better if you copied the whole sections and then put your edits so that you wouldn't be having to find each piece. If what's is on your sandbox is just the leading section, then it is a good edit. I like that there are links already of words that people could look into further like nasopharynx and cytoplasm. I have to make sure I do that in mine. I am not sure if you just had one reference or three. I would make sure to put it on the reference list and to reference each one that you used in the sentences. The one source I have seen you used seems like a good reliable source, but I would look for more just in case. I would be interested to see more images in the article so it would not just have words, otherwise, it looks good.