User:Zeeraybells/OLES2129

TUTORIAL ONE: Monday 11th March activity.

Instructions:

Activity 2 - From Scratch Find an article on a topic that you are interested in or are knowledgeable about. Have a look at the first substantial edit on that page through its revision history.

Activity 3 - Share your User Space Send a link to your user page (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:username/OLES2129) from your University email to r.myers@sydney.edu.au. Email subject line should be OLES2129 - Activity 1 or OLES2129 - Activity 2 depending on which activity you chose.

If you had created this article first - what would you have done differently? If you were the second reader, how would you have edited the article? Write up your thoughts on your user page (100-200 words is plenty). I looked at History of the Jews in Iraq. The original page gives a very brief introductory note. The most enticing pages include a lot of introductory detail that will give sufficient detail for most viewers. I would have given more time/words toward giving a broader overview of the Babylonian Jews. It also makes statements that are not necessarily fact, for example, "the oldest and historically most important" is a circumstantial statement. It also gives statements such as "It was to Babylon that the Jews were exiled" without supplying any additional information? When where they exiled? Who were they exiled by? Were they ALL exiled? This fact brings up more information than it answers.

TUTORIAL 6: Edit/Update a page.

I edited the page Ottoman Empire. Phrasing, grammar and syntax throughout the article was poor and needed adjusting