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Possible Improvements on the article Femicide
This article is pretty broad. I’d like to expand on the “Causes” sub-topic, and completely modify the subtopic “Tendency in serial killings.” Some of the information under this header is unnecessary like to contrasts in between the methods of killing between men and women. Additionally, I’d like to change some of the wording throughout the article. In certain parts it lacks the neutrality needed in a Wikipedia article. Also, I would like to update most of the data. Although the stats on the article are necessary, I think up-to-date data will be more beneficial to the reader.

Given that I have researched femicides in Mexico and the United States, I would like to expand on both of these sections in the article. And to close the article I would like to organize the “Legal solutions” into smaller sub-topics (headers). I think this will help the reader better understand how we can solve this problem.

References:

Dawson, Myrna, Michelle Carrigan, and Emily Hill. “Femicide.” Criminology, 2019. https://doi.org/10.1093/obo/9780195396607-0270.

“Femicide Census.” The Femicide Census, January 26, 2022. https://www.femicidecensus.org/.

Gonzalez-Mendez, Rosaura, and Juana Dolores Santana-Hernandez. “Professional Opinions on Violence against Women and Femicide in Spain.” Homicide Studies 16, no. 1 (2011): 41–59. https://doi.org/10.1177/1088767911428959.

“Latin America and the Caribbean Demographic Observatory 2017.” Latin America and the Caribbean Demographic Observatory, 2018. https://doi.org/10.18356/a6a37204-en-es.

Morena, Ines de la. “Machismo, Femicides, and Child's Play: Gender Violence in Mexico.” Harvard International Review. Harvard International Review, August 31, 2020. https://hir.harvard.edu/gender-violence-in-mexico-machismo-femicides-and-childs-play/.

Panuco-Mercado, Gabriel. “Melodrama and Italicized Language in an Era of #MeToo: A 2020 Review of Jeanine Cummins's American Dirt.” Georgetown Journal of International Affairs 21, no. 1 (2020): 216–19. https://doi.org/10.1353/gia.2020.0007.

Ṿail Shalṿah, Consuelo Corradi, and Marceline Naudi. “Understanding and Preventing Femicide Using a Cultural and Ecological Approach .” Essay. In Femicide across Europe: Theory, Research and Prevention, 54–69. Bristol: Policy Press, 2018.

“Womencount.” WomenCount, August 7, 2019. https://womencount.org/.

Alvarez-Ramos, Rebecca. “Femicides in Mexico from 1990 to Present: The Power of the Media in Respects to Fomentation and Advocacy against Femicides.” Knowledge UChicago. University of Chicago, January 1, 1970. https://knowledge.uchicago.edu/record/

Possible Improvements
Topic: Police Brutality in the US

I think the article needs some up-to-date information. Specifically on the

section of Recent Incidents. The article mentions the deaths of various black men in

the hands of police officers but lacks the inclusion of victims that are women. So, I

would like to include Breonna Taylor and Sandra Bland in this article. Additionally,

the article talks about some specific data, but doesn’t have a citation for it. I would

like to expand on these details (i.e. “ According to a 2015 and 2016 project by The

Guardian, more white people are killed by police in raw numbers than black people

are, but after adjusting this finding based on the fact that the black population is

smaller than the white population, twice as many black people are killed by police

per capita than white people are.”) This includes important data, but it doesn’t cite

the source that states this. Not having a citation makes the article seem

untrustworthy.

References:

Barrie, C. (2020). Searching Racism after George Floyd. Socius: Sociological

Research for a Dynamic World, 6, 237802312097150.

https://doi.org/10.1177/2378023120971507

Fine, M. (2021). George Floyd (October 14, 1973–May 25, 2020): Make Future

Public Health Better Than the Past. American Journal of Public Health, 111(5),

758. https://doi.org/10.2105/ajph.2021.306239

Klein, G. C. (2018). On the Death of Sandra Bland: A Case of Anger and

Indifference. SAGE Open, 8(1), 215824401875493.

https://doi.org/10.1177/2158244018754936

Krieger, N. (2020). ENOUGH: COVID-19, Structural Racism, Police Brutality,

Plutocracy, Climate Change—and Time for Health Justice, Democratic Governance,

and an Equitable, Sustainable Future. American Journal of Public Health, 110(11),

1620–1623. https://doi.org/10.2105/ajph.2020.305886

Lane, K., Williams, Y., Hunt, A. N., & Paulk, A. (2020). The Framing of Race:

Trayvon Martin and the Black Lives Matter Movement. Journal of Black Studies,

51(8), 790–812. https://doi.org/10.1177/0021934720946802

Moody-Ramirez, M., & Cole, H. (2018). Victim Blaming in Twitter Users’ Framing

of Eric Garner and Michael Brown. Journal of Black Studies, 49(4), 383–407.

https://doi.org/10.1177/0021934718754312

Peeples, L. (2020). What the data say about police brutality and racial bias — and

which reforms might work. Nature, 583(7814), 22–24.

https://doi.org/10.1038/d41586-020-01846-z

Purvis, D. E., & Blanco, M. (2019). Police Sexual Violence: Police Brutality,


 * 1) MeToo, and Masculinities. SSRN Electronic Journal. Published.

https://doi.org/10.2139/ssrn.3403676

Raval, V. V., Ovia, T., Freeman, M., Raj, S. P., & Daga, S. S. (2021). Discourses

about race in the United States: A thematic analysis of short essays. International

Journal of Intercultural Relations, 83, 98–113.

https://doi.org/10.1016/j.ijintrel.2021.05.004

Schwartz, S. A. (2020). Police brutality and racism in America. EXPLORE, 16(5),

280–282. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.explore.2020.06.010

Proposed changes to article "Femicide"
    I.       Lead

The lead of the article is a bit all over the place in my opinion. From the Wikipedia training that we received; I remember the lead being a snippet of all the information the article contains. The lead from the Femicide article does provide important information, but it also has unnecessary information or information that is not brought up in any other section of the article. There is a part of opposition and counterarguments in the lead. I believe that should have its own section. The idea that femicide shouldn’t even be a term is very prevalent. There are articles that support ending the usage of the term “femicide.”

Additionally, I think some information, even if it is just one sentence, about how intimate partner violence became more likely to happen due to the pandemic lockdowns that began occurring in 2020 would benefit the readers. This is so that the reader can have a better understanding of how the statistics are now, and how maybe they are much higher due to the Covid-19 pandemic, and the lockdowns that had to take place. I also want to include the fact that the term is not widely used which makes it very hard for femicides to be labeled as such.

References:

o  Dayan, H. (2018). Preventing femicide. Femicide and the Law, 111–143. https://doi.org/10.4324/9780203701850-6

o  World Health Organization. (n.d.). Violence against women. World Health Organization. Retrieved February 16, 2022, from https://www.who.int/news-room/fact-sheets/detail/violence-against-women

'''  II. Tendency in serial killings'''

       I believe the section is not needed. The title should be changed to “Serial femicides,” so that it actually relates to the main article. The tendency in serial killings just seems a bit redundant and pointless. Some of the information is actually important for the consensus of the article, but it would make more sense to move it to a different section. For example, the sentence about the 33 thousand homicide cases that remain unsolved can be part of the lead since it is a very important detail. The comparison between male and female serial killers is also unnecessary.

'''III. Causes'''

I would like to expand on the sub-section of Among Intimate Partners. I think something very important, is the increase in the likelihood of femicide when firearms are present in a household. There is only a single sentence on firearms, but I think it should be expanded. The statistics regarding firearms are definitely very alarming and have an effect on the femicides rate. The article, in my opinion, should have a focus on this topic.

I would also like to add a subtopic titled “Female Infanticide.” This is when newborn female children are killed because they’re female. This is a concern for nations like China, India, and Pakistan. Female infanticide happens because in some societies there is a bias against girls.

Additionally, a subtopic on “Misogynistic Views” will also be beneficial to the overall comprehension of the article. I think if we shine a light on the misogynist views that are prevalent in today’s society, we can better explain to the reader why it leads to femicides. Today, women are able to work and be as involved as ever before. Women have become more independent and are allowed to do just as much as men, but this can become dangerous in a society that values misogyny.

References:

o  Gun violence in America. Everytown Research & amp; Policy. (2022, February 8). Retrieved February 16, 2022, from https://everytownresearch.org/report/gun-violence-in-america/

o  Dawson, M., Carrigan, M., & amp; Hill, E. (2019). Femicide. Criminology. https://doi.org/10.1093/obo/9780195396607-0270

o  Dying to live: The gender dimension of child mortality in India. UN Women. (n.d.). Retrieved February 16, 2022, from https://www.unwomen.org/en/news/stories/2014/3/the-gender-dimensions-of-child-mortality-in-india

o  Gonzalez-Mendez, R., & amp; Santana-Hernandez, J. D. (2011). Professional opinions on violence against women and femicide in Spain. Homicide Studies, 16(1), 41–59. https://doi.org/10.1177/1088767911428959

o  Beyer, K. M., Layde, P. M., Hamberger, L. K., & amp; Laud, P. W. (2014). Does neighborhood environment differentiate intimate partner femicides from other femicides? Violence Against Women, 21(1), 49–64. https://doi.org/10.1177/1077801214564075

'''IV. Prevention'''

I would like to add a section on prevention. We can prevent femicides if social workers, police officers, and lawyers received proper training. Social workers sometimes lack the understanding needed to properly identify when someone is experiencing domestic violence. Additionally, sometimes the lack of knowledge on certain cultures and norms prevents the social worker to identify the signs of violence.

Also, education on femicide can also help decrease the number of femicides. If people are educated on femicide, what it is, and how to prevent it. It will help women leave the relationship since they will be able to know the signs of domestic violence. The media can be of great support on this, it can share information on femicide and make it available to all.

References:

o  Dayan, H. (2018). Preventing femicide. Femicide and the Law, 111–143. https://doi.org/10.4324/9780203701850-6

  V.       Mexico

I would like to add a small paragraph on the Mexico section about Fatima Cecilia, a nine-year-old girl that was a victim of femicide. She sparked an entire movement in Mexico, protests took place and one specifically caught my attention, “Un Dia Sin Mujeres.” I think adding a sentence or two about this would help the reader better understand femicide in Mexico.

References:

o  Panuco-Mercado, G. (2020). Melodrama and italicized language in an era of #MeToo: A 2020 review of Jeanine Cummins's American Dirt. Georgetown Journal of International Affairs, 21(1), 216–219. https://doi.org/10.1353/gia.2020.0007

Links:

I want to add a link to and from the article on the “Murder of Fatima Cecilia.” This will probably take place in the subtopic “Mexico.” I also want to add links to the article “Female infanticide in China,” and “Female infanticide in India.”